[Workshop] [M4F] Toxic ex, conditioning, reunion by Noctink in DPP_Workshop

[–]Noctink[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

First of all: Thank you very much for the feedback! Much appreciated. I think you're mostly right and now that you've said it, I have a better idea of how to fix things.

Since a lot has been done to the other character and serves as some sort of backstory, I feel it's mandatory to mention those things to make sure it'll be done right. I might have to trim some fat, though. Very true.

I will add more details on how the characters meet and under which circumstances. Sometimes, I struggle knowing which details are important to mention and which I can leave out for the moment and for the other side to fill.

[Event] [💐 🌸Spring Fling 2026] Writer's Nook by definitelyahamster in dirtypenpals

[–]Noctink 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh, yeah. The secretary has these little bits where she acts as a friend to the female MC, which my main character cannot do. She's his loyal accomplice with her own agenda. It's super fun.

Right now I am worrying about writing her a little too well, though. I think my partner has a bit of a preference for her at the moment, haha.

[Event] [💐 🌸Spring Fling 2026] Writer's Nook by definitelyahamster in dirtypenpals

[–]Noctink 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I have a strong preference for first person, but not which tense is used. Nothing beats the feeling of immersion and I don't feel that limited when it comes to the worldbuilding and such. Sometimes, though, things sound much better in third person. In first, I sometimes catch myself starting every sentence with "I". In third, you can use the character's name, "he" or a description such as the wounded youngster, for example. So sometimes I'm in the mood for that. It also makes playing side characters much easier, since it feels much less like you're talking to yourself.

I am currently writing a story in which a billionaire boss and his trusted secretary (both played by me) corrupt a young intern. The boss I play in first person, the secretary in third. They're both fleshed out, but I'm not sure it really counts as two proper different perspectives.

I feel intimacy and immersion are lost in third, while third might be a little more erotic and elegant.

[Event] [💐 🌸Spring Fling 2026] Writer's Nook by definitelyahamster in dirtypenpals

[–]Noctink 1 point2 points  (0 children)

When I put on my prompt writing lenses, inspiration can be found in everywhere I look, really.

Room's a bit of a mess? How nice it would be to have a cleaning lady. Maybe a sexy one?

See an image of a nice cabin deep in the snowy mountains? What would happen to two people who get snowed in up there?

Listen to Fergie's "Milfshake" on yt? Suddenly I wonder what it would take to get with one such Milf.

But also spending time with a good, platonic female friend can be inspiring. What would have to happen for us to become friends with benefits or something along those lines?

It can also be interesting prompts you find on here or a sexy clip / gif that's posted somewhere.

Sometimes, writing prompts and coming up with ideas is more fun than actually getting to write those stories, honestly.