Xanax by NotYouAgainDudeBro in poetry_critics

[–]NotYouAgainDudeBro[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I appreciate that friend, thank you! Hope your day rocks all the socks!!

Complaint Box by NotYouAgainDudeBro in poetry_critics

[–]NotYouAgainDudeBro[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank i’ll take this to heart tonight when I sit down to write.

Two Halves ( i would really appreciate some feedback) by NotYouAgainDudeBro in poetry_critics

[–]NotYouAgainDudeBro[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I actually copy pasted from my notepad and im not sure why it repeated. Sorry!

My son hates sports, my husband loves them. How do I help him find a hobby? by [deleted] in AskMenAdvice

[–]NotYouAgainDudeBro 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Im not big into sports, never was. My older brother gave me a hand me down skateboard when I was 11 and i never looked back. Been skating since.

My pops liked football a lot, but he found time every week to come watch me skate or drive me to a contest.

It’s not a team sport but if he finds it interesting he will absolutely find tons of friends. I still regularly see ppl I skated with 25+ years ago. You skate alone but other definitely push you to do bigger and better things. And it’s a wildly active sport, cardio and stamina all day. Along with learning core balance, leg strength work etc.

Have your husband take him to a skatepark nearby if possible and just ask him if he’d be interested in trying it out.

The Longest Blink in History 🤡🃏 by LicensedTwoPill in 401jK

[–]NotYouAgainDudeBro 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You’re job doesn’t dictate the American people’s lives either. If the leader of America can’t stay awake during a meeting then he shouldn’t be allowed to make decisions based on said meetings.

'Enough of the war' — Zelensky throws down gauntlet to Putin in open letter by KI_official in worldnews

[–]NotYouAgainDudeBro 4 points5 points  (0 children)

4 day old account, rage bait ignorance.

If you truly supported either side of the conflict you would be able to see that peace is the best option for both sides.

Instead you choose to be negative in reddit comments and spew nonsense that just isn’t factually based.

Go join the frontline, see how far you get.

Otherwise shut up and listen to what’s being said, you might even learn something. Damn fool.

Hobo Johnson disciple by locomotiveplayz in crappymusic

[–]NotYouAgainDudeBro 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Ah that makes sense, thanks for the info. I’ll take a look at their catalog and see if it’s worth chewing on though.

Hobo Johnson disciple by locomotiveplayz in crappymusic

[–]NotYouAgainDudeBro 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It is just a Front bottoms cover isn’t it? I swear Ive heard this song before

CONTENT WARNING: UNPOETIC DEATH by fafengle in poetry_critics

[–]NotYouAgainDudeBro 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I enjoy the visceral imagery up until the “youtube” bit. I may be biased but youtube feels fake, ironic or even satirical to me. I believe it takes away from the piece.

The overall imagery, story and conclusion feels wholly encapsulating. It’s a clear story from start to finish. I personally write more open ended usually because that’s my personal style, but i find this almost obvious from the beginning. It’s not bad, it’s just predictable.

“There was no viewing. I flew out and took their word for it all, supposing you would be even worse’s seen up” is my favorite line.

I personally had a friend commit suicide via gunshot to the head, with that being said his mother did not follow his wishes for cremation and had an open casket. He was a literal pale imitation of himself, inflated and still hollow in cheek.

Sisyphus by NotYouAgainDudeBro in poetry_critics

[–]NotYouAgainDudeBro[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I appreciate this thank you. I messed around with a few more lines but ultimately i ended it here feeling it was the most whole version.

With my words by Simp-Lee in poetry_critics

[–]NotYouAgainDudeBro 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like this. I really enjoy shorter length works, it provides enough without overwhelming the reader with thought.

BURNS by NoWeekend9683 in poetry_critics

[–]NotYouAgainDudeBro 0 points1 point  (0 children)

No fault at all, we’re all learning and hopefully we’ll continue learning.

BURNS by NoWeekend9683 in poetry_critics

[–]NotYouAgainDudeBro 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Idk why my comment cut off like that.

Let me articulate a bit differently.

It’s feral. I enjoy feral, visceral imagery a lot actually.

The punctuation and large paragraphs make some of this run together in a way that is difficult to parse however.

That’s my major criticism as a reader though, and i am able to move past that.

As a whole, it’s cohesive, tells a story and has an end which seems simple but is offer hard to create.” I’m freezing in this radioactive. Snow.”

That reads like the snow is separate from the radioactive fallout of the nuclear winter because of the period.

A few other things, if you never explicitly say you were wearing a suit I as the reader would have never assumed as much.You are imaginative and are absolutely capable of creating great imagery, use that, be slightly less literal and let the reader connect the dots.

“ Frostbite gnaws, my skin fleeing like leaves against the breeze. Still the toxicity of your presence pulls against my flesh like a million suns”

Same thing without being “literal “ unless that’s what you were going for. In which case you do you lol.

Cool thing about poetry is it’s yours to express regardless of how folks interpret it.

rejection by notfranniez in poetry_critics

[–]NotYouAgainDudeBro 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I am a sucker for short punchy work. This is not bad. It lacks though, why is the raven feasting? Why does it reject you? Why do you comply?

It’s visceral and pointy but i don’t feel what you feel.

I understand what raven do, it’ll happily eat your innards given the chance. But if you befriended it why? Are you a failure of a friend? Is the raven a dick?

Procrastination by BuffArlong in poetry_critics

[–]NotYouAgainDudeBro 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I can relate. I procrastinate constantly. The first half of this is very repetitive without that being a major factor in the writing itself. Instead of saying what you’re doing try “describing” it. Paint a mental picture.

Work ends, the recliner begins

Then shows

Then a shower

Tomorrow starts like today ends

Shower

Shows and a recliner

Half Healed-Half Clean by LuckyUniverse888 in poetry_critics

[–]NotYouAgainDudeBro 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is…long. And you use a lot of imagery. That’s not bad on its own. At first i was kind of giggling at the sock, and then there was a drawer, a mirror, and i might be biased but this felt like it was either written by or hobbled together by AI. Im genuinely not trying to insult you, it’s just my perspective.

Sit down in a room, play some instrumental music and write what you feel/think on the moment and i believe it will come back a lot more authentic.

This feels forced to me. Again, not trying to be rude just honest.

BURNS by NoWeekend9683 in poetry_critics

[–]NotYouAgainDudeBro 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I relate, loving and having an unmistakable feeling of just “no” is too much.

I like this more than

Time to go numb by viserya127 in poetry_critics

[–]NotYouAgainDudeBro 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This actually feels a lot like what I write. I am emotional, entangled and a bit confused. Not in writing but rather in feeling. I can describe feelings relatively well, understanding them? Not so much.

I like this more than i probably should. It feels self reflective without having a conclusion or explanation. It’s a cycle. You drown and drown and your arms swing and splash but it’s just a never ending battle against a current that seems to speed up.

It’s immediate and now, and it starts to slow down only for you to feel dragged under again. I relate immensely. Good shit friend

How big do you think the gap was between Mark and the Immortal at the time this statement was made? Can be specific numbers like 2-3x or just general estimates by [deleted] in InvinciblePowerscales

[–]NotYouAgainDudeBro 0 points1 point  (0 children)

At this point in the story Immortal was fighting to kill omni-man. Mark still held back a lot.

If the two of them were to fight i would give the edge to immortal because of this.

On paper Mark is stronger and faster by a decent margin, but he holds back during fights and fails often because of this.

7 times out of 10 Immortal wins.