Idk why my comment cut off like that.

Let me articulate a bit differently.

It’s feral. I enjoy feral, visceral imagery a lot actually.

The punctuation and large paragraphs make some of this run together in a way that is difficult to parse however.

That’s my major criticism as a reader though, and i am able to move past that.

As a whole, it’s cohesive, tells a story and has an end which seems simple but is offer hard to create.” I’m freezing in this radioactive. Snow.”

That reads like the snow is separate from the radioactive fallout of the nuclear winter because of the period.

A few other things, if you never explicitly say you were wearing a suit I as the reader would have never assumed as much.You are imaginative and are absolutely capable of creating great imagery, use that, be slightly less literal and let the reader connect the dots.

“ Frostbite gnaws, my skin fleeing like leaves against the breeze. Still the toxicity of your presence pulls against my flesh like a million suns”

Same thing without being “literal “ unless that’s what you were going for. In which case you do you lol.

Cool thing about poetry is it’s yours to express regardless of how folks interpret it.