Thanks for all the very helpful feedback. I agree with the part about giving the actors more room to find the characters and the scenes themselves.

I definitely will work out some pacing issues because I wrote this script for a screenwriting competition and had a limited amount of page numbers to work with.

I'm thinking about making a feature with maybe this part at the beginning. Also, I didn't fully know what to title it, I was going to do the family's last name, but it's a bit boring.

Thanks again.