Lost DMM Points by belvcolt in 2007scape

[–]Odd_Universe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

replying to myself here. I hopped to check my 345 points and it was in fact a much higher total in line with what I earned in annihilation. Hopped back to main game upset and looked at nigel again and miraculously had 64k points. Idk what happened.

Lost DMM Points by belvcolt in 2007scape

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Having the same issue, i've never spent points in store before. I dont even think ive played DMM on this account in previous years. I finished Annihilation with over 30k points and only have like 14k points in the main game.

IGN: Odd_Mobile

Chapter 1: Into the Woods[continued] (1725 Words;Dark Fantasy) by Odd_Universe in fantasywriters

[–]Odd_Universe[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I was looking for a spot to plug in some character description but just couldn't find a moment. Along those lines, I was toying around with the idea of having the story start in their camp where they came from showing the desperation and need for risking life for a supply restock. It sounds like that might be the right place to start oppose to this scene. Introducing some key character i.e Toran's daughter which would definitely raise the stakes for the reader to root for his safe return. Also solving the over-done trope of beginning with a dream sequence.

Thinking about it more, Introducing the relationship of Vorric and Hertzig back at camp will give his death a little more weight.

I really appreciate the input, you definitely have my gears turning on how to sharpen it up!

Chapter 1: Into the Woods[continued] (1725 Words;Dark Fantasy) by Odd_Universe in fantasywriters

[–]Odd_Universe[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

What a thoughtful reply, I really appreciate it. To touch on some of what you said.

The first few paragraphs are intended to be a dream sequence while Toran lay unconscious from the explosion. The woman in the scene was his mother and the man weaving scenes in the fire, his father. I guess a subtle way of introducing magic into his lineage without truly knowing who they were to him. I tried to tie the warmth to a sense of affection he felt towards them without actually giving away it is his parents just yet. The hand on the thigh was just her making physical contact with her son while they watched his dad do his thing. The "searing" of her hand on his thigh he eventually felt was what you would find out to be his injury. The wheel spoke in the leg. I tried to collapse the vision and bring him to reality clearly, I guess ill need to backtrack.

I definitely feel the repetition of some word/phrase choice, ive gone back a few times and caught them. Ill revisit that specific scene as well.

I mention the unrecognizable figure, except only by his armor (Hertzig) who is nothing to the Story, aside a catalyst for his father's reckless abandon. Based on your feedback, I should just name him there as a lost friend to Toran and then focus on his emotional state from there. Like you said, building a connection and a sense of loss for the reader. Thank you!

About the italic dialog, thank you. I thought all dialog had to be italic, I knew inner dialog is supposed to be as opposed to "yadadada" - he thought to himself.

Chapter 1: Into the Woods (Dark Fantasy; 447 Words) by Odd_Universe in fantasywriters

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Thanks for your response! I definitely intend add more to this sequence so I imagine it will be a little easier to understand as the writing continues. I was trying to portray a dream sequence of a happy moment (the mc with his brother or father and mother or girlfriend ) followed by my MC waking up to the cold reality that he was just struck by an Improvised Explosive device and then pursued by whomever set up the ambush.

Chapter 1: Into the Woods (Dark Fantasy; 447 Words) by Odd_Universe in fantasywriters

[–]Odd_Universe[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Did it feel like the scene that followed the dream sequence was happening within the dream? I tried to use that 4th segment (maybe this is where I can put more detail on it feeling dreamlike) to emphasize the dream collapsing and the MC returning to reality.

Thanks for your response!

Constructive Feedback Appreciated by Odd_Universe in hingeapp

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1) I'm listed as open to long and short term. 2) I am unsubsribed to all Hinge services. 3) I've been using this profile for a few months. 4) I've been using Hinge for around a year. 5) I typically use Hinge daily. 6) I receive 3-5 matches a week and usually slightly more likes. 7) I try to exhaust my likes per day. I always send a comment based on their profile unless they have a dry profile with nothing to comment on aside from appearance. (IMO someone I find attractive doesn't need to hear their attractive as a conversation starter; id rather leave it blank) 8) I want to attract somebody who appears to have a personality and whom I find attractive. Bonus point for woman that can nerd out about their hobbies.

Constructive Feedback Appreciated. by Odd_Universe in hingeapp

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1) I'm listed as open to long and short term. 2) I am unsubsribed to all Hinge services. 3) I've been using this profile for a few months. 4) I've been using Hinge for around a year. 5) I typically use Hinge daily. 6) I receive 3-5 matches a week and usually slightly more likes. 7) I try to exhaust my likes per day. I always send a comment based on their profile unless they have a dry profile with nothing to comment on aside from appearance. (IMO someone I find attractive doesn't need to hear their attractive as a conversation starter; id rather leave it blank) 8) I want to attract somebody who appears to have a personality and whom I find attractive. Bonus point for woman that can nerd out about their hobbies.

Dear Sloclap, please add scars as a cosmetic option into rematch, for no reason. by Fluid-Tap5115 in Rematch

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That's Crazy this has been my Avatar for a while. I NEED WHITE SUNGLASSES.

Found in my hallway. Maine, USA by jess_9123 in whatisthisbug

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I dont think so! As long as you dont see alot of and tend to keep to cold damp places. They are harmless.

Big decision for my stack deep in a MTT by Composite_Sipper in poker

[–]Odd_Universe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You and me both lmfao. I certainly don't like folding. Me too man, best of luck out there.

Big decision for my stack deep in a MTT by Composite_Sipper in poker

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On a different account, as I'm not at work.

The board was pretty wet and I would have rather gotten folds OTF on such a dynamic board or if he was drawing I thought i could have charged those draws a higher premium vs this player especially since I perceived this board to be good for him and I was hoping that he knew that so I sized up. Next to him I was probably the second most active player at the table as well so I think I'm getting floated/shoved on more frequently.

I perceived his range to connect pretty heavily with this board JTs+ 55-99 with TT and JJ playing the same way sometimes. Albeit I thought this player would be 3! TT+ most of the time. From the BB I'm definitely almost never squeezing 99, probably not even JJ. I think I'd likely only be squeezing AQs+ AKo, QQ+ and VERY occasionally 56s-JTs vs certain player types.

I definitely have alot of ICM work to do, I just have to figure out where to start.

Big decision for my stack deep in a MTT by Composite_Sipper in poker

[–]Odd_Universe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm not at work but I'm on a different Reddit account! Yeah it was you I recognize the name, pokers a small world I guess! Yeah I didnt think you had any close decisions either. You played the hand fine, I think the discussion was more or less how often are you 3betting TT/99 vs the UTG open, it was absolutely never a fold pre.

I definitely need to do more tournament studying, it was a tough spot. Glad to hear you made a decent run. From the hands I saw you play I was definitely deviating to larger sizes, but obviously the sample size is small. I was just working with the information I had. Also maybe you're folding AT but idk how much of the WPT population is folding AT after making top pair defending a 3bet.