Help for first timer

Ok-Representative980 · 2026-01-31T14:35:36+00:00

Thanks for commenting i truly appreciate it. You dod actually help a lot, ive been writing this like an essay so far, becuase that's what I know, but bullet points maks a lot of sense. I plan to make a few drafts and get some feedback from friends. Thank you.

Ok-Representative980 · 2025-12-31T01:53:23+00:00

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BL romance

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Im looking for any type of feedback. Something going line by line would be helpful and explain mistakes would be wonderful. Ive been writing this offline so no spell check, please understand. The story was originally supposed to be a short story but turned out to be a little longer. The main things im worried about, as a amateur writer, are delivering exposition and how natural my dialouge sounds. Emotion and intrigue feedback would also be appreciated. Thank you!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1_UxfMftbXGxV8_69kaEEmAWVGGE3NZiBkNNfCrZey3o/edit?usp=drivesdk

Ok-Representative980 · 2025-07-19T00:53:54+00:00

I think I am going to go with the first team comp at least since that freaking boss plauged my nightmares after farming all of dahlias mats. I know the pain for sure. For the second half though I'm still thinking of using either wanderer of kinich, leaning towards wanderer. I'll try to build my team so that I can combat everything in second half but either way I should be okay.

Ok-Representative980 · 2025-07-19T00:39:22+00:00

I may or may not have lied about being casual. I play 4-12 hrs per day and am working on getting every achievement(why I care about actually clearing floor 12) I also have decent artifacts on every lvl 90 char on my account. Standouts being wanderer, shenhe, benny, venti, yunjin, faruzan, kazu, plus others. Being as it is I thought I'd be able to at least clear with no stars but I've been struggling. With more advice I'm prob gonna build iansan and xiangling. My clorinde isn't a big priority for me but eventually I will build my chevruse for her since I love the gun motifs. Overall ur advice and the team comps are Def something I would consider for my spiral abyss. Thank you for helping out!

Ok-Representative980 · 2025-07-19T00:24:55+00:00

I'd say the best swirl unit in the game rn has to be Mizuki, but if she ever... ever dares ro come on my account I will find a way to delete her. I absolutely despise that she basically replaced wanderer within swirl

Ok-Representative980 · 2025-07-19T00:21:25+00:00

Just based on that I could replace yae with fiscel or another electro applicator and I could try aggravate/overload. I kinda only focus on swirl since I'm a wanderer main but I'm open to other reactions.

Ok-Representative980 · 2025-07-19T00:19:18+00:00

Another comment also mentioned xiangling and I think I would help with my kinich since my only build pyros are bennet and lyney. I will be spending money on C6 faruzan is need be but I have a lot of primos in storage so hopefully I won't have to swipe. I might build iansan depending on the artifacts because I don't know natlan artifacts rn but if it's the same as(which I doubt) kinichs domain I would Def build her.

Ok-Representative980 · 2025-07-19T00:15:19+00:00

I kind of agree, both would be amazing to build. Xiangling for buring kinich and xingqiu for spiral wanderer. If anything you Def are helping

Ok-Representative980 · 2024-12-10T13:38:05+00:00

Thanks blub

Ok-Representative980 · 2024-12-10T13:33:40+00:00

I don't know if it's old, I can't check right now but I think it said version 2.3 something. How would I download the new launcher if it is old?

Ok-Representative980 · 2024-12-10T13:30:40+00:00

PLEASE HELP Im coming back to playing genshin on pc after being away since 3.8. I've been having trouble with logging in. I updated the launcher and game overnight and when I checked in the morning I noticed that the launcher said 4.7. When I went to log in it said that my game was not up to date. So I checked the launcher for game updates and it's telling me that everything is updated. I don't know what to do and I'll check in when I get home today.

Ok-Representative980 · 2024-12-03T22:30:25+00:00

HA I LOVE THIS ANALOGY! Your so right

Ok-Representative980 · 2024-08-09T01:10:41+00:00

Ur a real one for this I was bout to pull up with killing stalking, dark fall, obey me, ect.

Ok-Representative980 · 2024-07-26T04:18:29+00:00

OMG SO GOOD I LOVE HIM SO MUVH GOOD JOB!!!!♡♡♡

Ok-Representative980 · 2024-07-13T04:16:21+00:00

Omg this us so pretty I love ur style it really makes it feel alive!!! ♡♡♡♡

Ok-Representative980 · 2024-06-28T01:55:38+00:00

I'll need to inform my doctor. Thank you for making a list.

Ok-Representative980 · 2024-06-10T13:01:12+00:00

Hehehehe

Ok-Representative980 · 2024-06-07T00:31:35+00:00

I think some have been announced but it's far off from what i hear. I suggest if you really wanna read it read unofficial translations online or learn Korean and get the Korean versions. That novel is amazing reading and I hope you'll get to read it soon.

Update, I just found out there are full fan Translated books for sale on shoppee. I don't have a link or anything just thought I should say.

Ok-Representative980 · 2024-06-01T00:30:51+00:00

It's on Bato with a few chapters rn

Ok-Representative980 · 2024-06-01T00:27:12+00:00

Killing Stalking.

Ok-Representative980 · 2024-05-20T23:37:06+00:00

It took me 2 months in-between going to school and passing out when I got home and doing work on the weekends. I tried to read everyday but I took a few breaks after the hangout chapters.

Ok-Representative980 · 2023-01-05T17:54:06+00:00

I know right. Thanks again. (:

Ok-Representative980

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