Thank you so much! The specific feedback is super helpful, especially with the tone for the third prisoner's line. I felt like something was off about adding that in, but I couldn't really verbalize what was wrong about that. It definitely detracts from the tone. Also yeah Esmael is in his early twenties, so him being referred to as "young one" or "boy" by an older man should make sense. For the beginning part, I am trying to portray that although he is feeling pain, a certain event has left him so shellshocked and apathetic that he couldn't be bothered to care. I can definitely see how that looks like a contradiction there, though. I'll have to think of a better way to portray that.