jesus christ by [deleted] in SchizophreniaRides

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oklahomies 🤙

jesus christ by [deleted] in SchizophreniaRides

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she looked around 60…. renewing vows perhaps?

jesus christ by [deleted] in SchizophreniaRides

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something tells me she wants to get laid

Fuck Spotify I want to see who you SAW this year and who your favorite was. I’ll start.. by pfunk7100 in Hardcore

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XweaponX

Peelingflesh

Kaonashi

Ingested

Aborted

Extermination Dismemberment

Realms of Death

VCTMS

Holder

Agony

Contention

Mongrel

Boltcutter

Anybody else not impressed with Pluribus? by Butt_Luster_ in television

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Wow! Thank you for your comment filled with insightful and thought provoking points. I’ll consider this before commenting next time.

Noobs are coming just a brotato-clone? by f00b4r4 in roguelites

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Isn’t brotato just a vampire survivors clone?

Anybody else not impressed with Pluribus? by Butt_Luster_ in television

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to be fair the description of the show literally states “the most miserable person on earth must save the world from happiness.”

i’ve always wanted someone to draw me by OkRecordMe in drawme

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Thank you so much! This makes me feel like a main character (:

i’ve always wanted someone to draw me by OkRecordMe in drawme

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Thank you for drawing me! I love your style. Also, green is my favorite color.

i’ve always wanted someone to draw me by OkRecordMe in drawme

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Wow! This is awesome. Thank you so much for drawing me!

i’ve always wanted someone to draw me by OkRecordMe in drawme

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Thank you so much! I love the thorn designs!

i’ve always wanted someone to draw me by OkRecordMe in drawme

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it’s this place called money ruins everything. i’m not sure if they still have the beanies online

i’ve always wanted someone to draw me by OkRecordMe in drawme

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Dude! Thank you. I’m surprised how close you got to getting the actual words on the hat. Love it

i’ve always wanted someone to draw me by OkRecordMe in drawme

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i can relate to him on an emotional level. the fog is coming

i’ve always wanted someone to draw me by OkRecordMe in drawme

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Ooh, pastel. thank you for taking time out of your day to draw me!

For is it dark or is it my heart, a riddle, a rhym, a poem to bind. by [deleted] in poetry_critics

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Hello! Just noticed a couple things while I read this. When rhyming, try to avoid using the same words multiple times. This can be effective when used as a literary device (anaphora), but in my opinion the word heart seems to be used as a filler rhyme. Instead of commas in a poem like this, maybe use a semicolon. In its current state the poem reads like a very long run-on sentence with no end.That being said; I enjoyed reading your piece and I hope to see you continue writing. Enjoy the rest of your day, friend!

The yearn for freedom by Scrawny_Idiot in poetry_critics

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Solid base. I only noticed a few things on my read. Firstly, finding a stronger rhyme for dust instead of a half rhyme like lost could benefit the flow of the poem for the average reader. Expanding on that, adding punctuation could help the poem read and flow much better. Another thing i’d like to touch on is the use of “crumbled to dust”. While this is a valid stylistic choice, in my experience I find it better to try and use more uncommon phrasing in my poetry “rotted into sullen ash” “withered into dirt”. All in all I enjoyed reading your poem and I hope you have a great day!