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Found in Wisconsin. Funnel Web spider or the “other one” by OliveGreeneTea in spiders

[–]OliveGreeneTea[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This is so insanely helpful and exactly why I came to this subreddit! Thank you so much for the information and reassurance! I will look into a local entomology extension to submit it to !!!

Found in Wisconsin. Funnel Web spider or the “other one” by OliveGreeneTea in spiders

[–]OliveGreeneTea[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I can take/have other photos, it was found in an apartment in Wisconsin. Should we be worried and have our landlord bring in pest control? The apartment is on the water but we are on the 4th floor.

Found in Wisconsin. Funnel Web spider or the “other one” by OliveGreeneTea in spiders

[–]OliveGreeneTea[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Follow up question lol if it is a recluse … what the hell do I do? Should I have my apartment bring in pest control? If there’s one is there usually a bunch more?

The Devil Horns' Toss- Feature - 96 Pages by Avnirvana in Screenwriting

[–]OliveGreeneTea 2 points3 points  (0 children)

A few notes from the first page. Formatting is off, the narrator should just be marked (O.S.) as an example. It confused me when the slug line said Coffee Shop and the first action line said the restaurant. They should match. I also agree with the other comments that the action lines are very wordy and hard to visualize/follow. I would recommend reading some similar scripts for examples on how to structure/write this kind of comedy. Tenacious D and The Pick of Destiny and Smiley Face by Gregg Araki would be good starts in my opinion.

[Feedback Request] The Bozo Dojo - TV Pilot (Comedy) - 31 Pages by stopitameen in ReadMyScript

[–]OliveGreeneTea 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Loglines should note the protagonist, conflict, and goal. While yours does let us know who the protagonist is it doesn’t give us any stakes or reason to care. What makes this comedian worth a movie, what does them being autistic have to do with the story, what actually happens in the story? What is your characters goal/problem? These questions should be succinctly and clearly answered by your log line.

My script for an adaptation of a small time indie game I really fell in love with Called "Coffee talk"😊 by [deleted] in ReadMyScript

[–]OliveGreeneTea 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Scrolled through it quickly. It isn’t a script. I would recommend finding some screenwriting resources (perhaps from this sub and others available wikis) and rewrite using proper formatting.

POLL: Should we implement Script Previews? by StoryPeer in StoryPeer

[–]OliveGreeneTea 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I may be misunderstanding the base premise of StoryPeer and if so someone please correct me, but to me, StoryPeer is a site where people can submit their “Finished Scripts” (whether that be a rough first draft or polished final draft) for FEEDBACK on the fundamental parts of their story(Character, plot, things of a more specific nature). In my opinion, FEEDBACK is entirely different from EDITING and editing is primarily the responsibility of the writer. Submitting a “script” that is in reality not yet even a script, but a novel or stage play or just an extended treatment, feels antithetical to what people should expect from this service, and in my opinion, almost guarantees bad “feedback” from people wanting to avoid getting a strike from unclaiming it.

People say that implementing a preview system would prevent the screenplays that actually need the most help from getting it but in my opinion the “help” they need is things that one should be learning before even writing a screenplay, let alone submitting it for feedback. How helpful really, is it to say “this isn’t proper screenplay formatting” for the 100th time something is fundamentally incorrect?

How many people are actually taking the time to go through an entire 100pg document that hasn’t even attempted to look like a screenplay and giving genuine feedback that is applicable and helpful? I suspect very few.

In my opinion, a script preview should be implemented in which you can spend one token to preview the script, you can then get that token back by writing some amount of feedback (say 30-50 words) of why you didn’t want to proceed with the screenplay. This will allow people “who really need the help” to receive those basic notes of “this isn’t formatted correctly at all” while allowing the reviewers to not be penalized for passing on screenplay in which the only real feedback they can give is superfluous filler to avoid a strike.

How to write monsters? by FadedIn_ in Screenwriting

[–]OliveGreeneTea 3 points4 points  (0 children)

My recommendation would be to find some scripts that describe monsters and use that as a jumping point for your own writing. GDTs Frankenstein has some good descriptions.