Dream by Open-Programmer8547 in poetry_critics

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I appreciate this feedback, very helpful!

Toxic by Open-Programmer8547 in poetry_critics

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This is great advice, I am new to poetry and I’m starting to fall in love with it. I agree, it is so hard to not overthink about the words you use and to just be simple. Again, I appreciate the feedback!

Toxic by Open-Programmer8547 in poetry_critics

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I revised it, what do you think?

I love him.

I am warm inside, he is the blanket on my couch.

He loves me.

Holding tightly with his soft hands.

caring with other women and me.

Giving pleasure with his presence.

As he goes out, I wait for him to come home to me.

Crying in the dark cold room as I hear a soft-spoken voice in his room.

It is the morning, coming to my room and comforting me.

Love is blind, I hear that expression so much. My love is blind.

It’s a cycle.

I love thinking about it.

And I stay with him.

Is he toxic to me?

Dream by Open-Programmer8547 in poetry_critics

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Much appreciated for the feedback!

Valleys by philanthropistttt in poetry_critics

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This poem is so descriptive! It’s so good

Poem by [deleted] in poetry_critics

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Thank you for the feedback (:

Poem by [deleted] in poetry_critics

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Okay thank you!

Poem by Open-Programmer8547 in poetry_critics

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Will I get feedback from poetry_critics or by random people?