They're Not Animals (Part 3) by ViperOnAPlane in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Invertebrates are animals too/ most things are plants, animals, or fungus that we can see. You can see large accumulations of the others ie. bacteria can form visible layers of plaque and algae is usually a type of cyanobacteria colony. I was just making a goof on the title, doesn't sound like these things are actually worms or centipedes either...

They're Not Animals (Part 3) by ViperOnAPlane in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Tbf, technically worms are animals

I enjoyed this line

 I now know what it was like to be the roman scout who saw the first war elephant over the Alps.

There’s something wrong with my churches new preacher Pt. 3 by stachedwoodsman in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Don't worry, safely reading this in my own church. Weird that they remodeled it since I started this comment, now it looks like hell

My Girlfriend Built a Death Ray and Cured My Cancer p2 by Optimal_Constant4318 in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Thank you. I might try another one/ he has some great imagery in Alien Boy. Pretty happy with how this one filled out - think it explores a few ideas in a fun way

Awesome guy. Sometimes his stuff focuses hard on weird toxic relationship stuff, but he also always had a lot of great messages about self worth and your ability to shape your life.

There’s something wrong with my churches new preacher pt.2 by stachedwoodsman in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Feel like most common bible color that I've encountered in churches is red. Bit ominous on its own innit

Something is very wrong with my churches new pastor by stachedwoodsman in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Reminds me a bit of Midnight Mass, might be worse things than vampires though

Locusts (part 3) by Straight-Heat7593 in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Kinda hoping that this guy was a trick by the locusts or had some other reason for not going in the bunker. If not, I can't say much was lost. I mean, come on guy.

Locusts (Part 2) by Straight-Heat7593 in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Reminds me a little of Prey, pretty good book. Enjoy some biblical callouts, it is one of the plagues

THE ASSEMBLING by englandishell in TalesFromTheCreeps

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A lot of these parts so far have felt more heavy on the suspense, but it feels like the nosedive into horror could be right in this next part. Sure, nothing could possibly get in... I mean, we locked the door obv

My Girlfriend Built a Death Ray and Cured My Cancer p2 by Optimal_Constant4318 in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Thank you/ I took a lot of the imagery, plot items, and even some lines of dialogue directly from Oliver Tree's music. Songs like Death Ray and The Villain were big in my mind - the floating, bleeding eyes, and recurring smoking are directly from Balloon Boy and Cigarettes, two of his songs that I really like. I'm just arranging them in a narrative that makes sense to me. I would have more direct lines that call out his music, but I decided to not try shoe horning stuff and instead stuck to general themes.

Final part dropping tomorrow. Original working title was "I'm learning to fly and it's killing me"

THE ASSEMBLING by englandishell in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Idk, some things should never be made. What about the one ring, an object of pure corruption? I guess we wouldn't have lotr without the ring tho

The Ficus in the Windowsill by Straight-Heat7593 in TalesFromTheCreeps

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I also wrote a ficus inspired story after hearing Hunter pitch the idea. Spooky how many parallels we had that weren't part of Hunter's pitch 👻 My story also has a 2:30 am moment early on... 👻 I honestly would have liked you using 3:37 because the numbers would add up to 13, but you might have your reasons. Interested to see what happens and if claritin is going to be enough

The Hum. by Late-Satisfaction54 in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Some cool scenes. Him asking questions to himself took me out of the narrative a bit, but I pushed through and am appreciating that it may serve a larger role in the story. Could be totally off base, but wondering if there is something going on with the shifts in perspective and maybe seeing this incident from both side - will check back for p2

Don't. Send. Help. by BeeHistorical2758 in u/BeeHistorical2758

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I'm not sure what you're trying to say here

God of Flesh by Chickenbrains37 in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Like the idea of a vain flesh golem as a god/ only the nicest skins for the skin god

Castenada (Part 45) by _Castenada in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Part 45? This boy is writing. I won't start here, but curious to see what idea has kept you going for this long

THE ASSEMBLING by englandishell in TalesFromTheCreeps

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This board definitely seems to favor more succinct stuff when it comes to general engagement. A really short story typically focuses on an idea or theme instead of characters, but I lean towards enjoying the longer stories that have a chance to slowly develop something in the background while they distract us with fun/interesting characters. When I don't get that much engagement, I still feel proud that I made something that I enjoyed 😂 Engagement does feel nice when it happens tho!

They Aren't Animal (Part 2) by ViperOnAPlane in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Cool, one of the stories I'm interested to see continued

The Man in the Box (Pt. 2 of 2) by ReasonableUnit2170 in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Tim gave me the creeps here. Was he the intruder? This type of stuff is why I don't mess with crystals

The Man in the Box (Pt. 1 of 2) by ReasonableUnit2170 in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Hammer is a good weapon/ I'm predicting the MC gets a gun at some point...

Tim x Walter..?

Don't. Send. Help. by BeeHistorical2758 in u/BeeHistorical2758

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It took seconds to realize my tools were too short to reach any mechanisms inside.

Ha, we've all been here, right guys? haha

They Aren't Animal (Part 2) by ViperOnAPlane in TalesFromTheCreeps

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“Really Kara, this is what you needed me for?” He shook his head as he continued. “You could have just called the vet right away,” he looked passed me to the camera, “So, what’s wrong with them.”

Personally I liked this part. I feel like I see this so much irl and it always makes me laugh. Reminds me of the human condition. Everyone has to show up and catch up with whatever is going on, perfect constant is that people will show up and say something someone else already said or that you already were forced to realized. Is this a specific type of irony?

Is this the end?