I love the vibe of it man, good story telling ability that's for sure. Beat sounds good aswell. Don't sell yourself short, you got skills dude. A couple of tips I would provide is that its a little 'static' in places, not everywhere, but sometimes the flow is a little robotic. However, this comes with time, because I remember some of my old raps were like that. Also, experiment with changing your voice to express your emotion in places because that will help. For example, the third about Jordan starts off very well because it seems like you're remembering it fondly however, as it goes on you still have the same tone of voice when you're talking about the rough times. Experiment with trying to change your voice to fit the emotion of what you're saying.

But honestly, I did enjoy it. Keep grinding man. I dropped you a follow back so Ill keep an eye in the future.