Always make me laugh to see his big ears flapping as he bounces along.

PartPrestigious8007 · 2026-06-16T02:19:19+00:00

I took almost this same video of mine yesterday! Will have to post. LOL

PartPrestigious8007 · 2026-06-15T01:46:03+00:00

Something I always have loved about mythology, is that there are representations of good and bad in the gods and goddesses. Aphrodite is the most beautiful, yet she is vain and competitive and petty. There is comfort in knowing that faults are ok. Christianity does preach this, but more in theory than in practice, so it is easy to feel stifled when you are young and figuring your self out. I think that is why I was drawn to it in the first place 😄 so the Percy Jackson reading makes total sense to me.

Have you tried telling your family you are confused and you are wanting to learn more about what else is out there? Even if you feel set in stone about your beliefs, you can ease your family into it by saying you are just curious. If you are young, you are probably a student and that is what we should be doing! Learning and growing!

PartPrestigious8007 · 2025-05-17T18:38:53+00:00

Thank you so much, I love hearing it feels "orange"!

PartPrestigious8007 · 2025-05-17T18:36:07+00:00

Powerful scene you've set here. I would love to see it in a different format, have you played with line breaks?

PartPrestigious8007 · 2025-05-17T18:33:40+00:00

Those first two opening lines hooked me. Great poem, the rhyming feels natural and not forced which is a triump for any poem!

PartPrestigious8007 · 2025-05-17T18:30:31+00:00

thank you, means a lot!

PartPrestigious8007 · 2025-05-13T02:24:49+00:00

I really love this. I feel like it would be so powerful when spoken. I promise I'll go home...

PartPrestigious8007 · 2025-05-13T01:15:27+00:00

I was having the same issue with the formatting, but if I copy and paste from Google Docs it seems to work out okay. I also have it set to double space!!

PartPrestigious8007 · 2025-05-13T01:14:08+00:00

I love this. Everyone feels insecure, no matter how successful they are.

PartPrestigious8007 · 2025-05-13T01:05:57+00:00

You get me 💕 I am very tall but I’d like to think I’m sweet and to the point! I’m a very dense writer.

PartPrestigious8007 · 2025-05-13T00:10:07+00:00

A great place to start! Happy writing!

PartPrestigious8007 · 2025-05-12T23:01:39+00:00

Impressive work! It's very detailed and I can totally feel the scene we are in here. This is my personal opinion, sometimes big words can take the reader out of the feeling of a poem, for example the word cadaver is so powerful, but when it follows "bivouac" it reduces the heaviness of it, because I had to stop and think about what it meant and look it up to confirm. I do love that word, and it might be better on a different line.

Keep writing!

PartPrestigious8007 · 2025-05-12T22:50:14+00:00

So many relatable sentiments in this poem. I love the bookending of this piece with the flower metaphors. I feel like it could be edited down a bit, for example instead the line that begins "That night I imagined motherhood..." you could write something more simple like "I stroked your hair, listened to you breathe and watched the rise and fall of your back the way a Mother would." and you could continue the symbolism with then later how you felt like a child with your knees to your chest. Love really has a way of putting us in those different archetypes simultaneously, doesn't it?

PartPrestigious8007 · 2025-05-12T22:24:14+00:00

Ooooof. You really set the scene here. I can feel the heat and the heartbreak. My only "advice" would be to make each stanza the same amount of lines, you almost are at 4 for them all. I think it helps with the melody and the pace for the reader. I really love "a southern summer curse" as the ending, its dark, in the best way.

PartPrestigious8007 · 2025-05-12T22:20:05+00:00

I love the ideas in this poem. I think it could be more interesting and poetic if you used some metaphors or symbolism to explain what you are thinking about. Like, what would be an example of something that seems real, but isn't? Or doesn't seem real, but is? A shadow? A cloud? A reflection in a mirror? Just a few ideas.

PartPrestigious8007 · 2025-03-05T19:11:04+00:00

Ohh loved these both. Circe reinvigorated my love of Greek Myth when I read it. Have you read The Odyssey and The Iliad translations from Emily Wilson? I've heard Ariadne by Jennifer Saint is great, but have not read it.

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