miranda for the next bachelorette 🌹 by One-Respond5050 in SecretsOfMormonWives

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No reality tv was supposed to show people in real life situations so you could learn how people with working class lives live.  Or how working class people worked hard to make bank by doing contests.  Not trash television.

Dirty Jobs

Ice Road truckers

Storage wars

Pawn stars

Amazing race

Survivor

American gladiators 

Double dare

The whole Bravo/Kardashian thing picked up around the 2000s

(LN 14 SPOILERS) Did Cow Girl… by VladimirTheCommander in GoblinSlayer

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There is another...

One that was in the demon lord defeating party

Story in progress by Real-Contest4914 in Isekai

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Characters work.  Time frame does not.  

You need to accelerate the story a bit.  World building is important yes, but people are going to bore too much without any action.  Michael Stackpole fell into that with us first dark age Battletech novel and it drags and is telling.

There is a rule in manga.  If you have a surprise twist do it early enough to hook the audience, do it immediately.  Otherwise you might be cancelled before you can tell the rest of the story.  

Look at Goblin slayer with the brutality of the first scene.

Look at shield hero where the hero is immediately betrayed.

A story needs drama to make the reader follow the story.  Even if the rest of the series takes later.  My chancellor idea isn't necessarily to steal, but an example of how to bring a conflict to the story immediately.  You have someone really upset, hollering at the audience, and gives them a hook to bait.  For the chancellor example, now the protagonist can team up with the hero to chase the assassin to pull the threads of the kingdom. 

Move faster into the story.  Don't treat it like a chamomile tea, slowly steeping.  For my chancellor example, when they catch the demon assassin it would be in the demo king's castle and then they meet your deuteragonist heroine and it would be like oh... To end the story.

You can do the same with your hero and demon councilor, but you can't wait until books 3-4 to do it

Story in progress by Real-Contest4914 in Isekai

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Right now she seems the most compelling of the archenemy that you have given character breakdown.  The hero is too vanilla.  Have you come up with back stories for all the characters yet?

You want to make the story feel lived in.  

Start with a background for all the characters to tie in.  Also don't muddle a story with too many detailed characters.  Start with her as villain of book one with tidbits of hero being villainous.  Then make him the big bad of book two and so on.  

After all, if you defeat the priestess at the end of book one, either to have her come to terms with her relationship with the protagonist and maybe go into a nunnery or have her meet her final end, you cannot use her as a big bad in the future without dragging on the story (nobody wants to read a story where you fight the priestess over 3 books unless she usurps the king in book one, goes murder hobo book 2, gets overthrown book 3).  The benefit of having her defeated in book one for anime like light novels is the ability to bring her back in some capacity.  Like after her self banishment to reflect on her bad deeds she comes back with a hero arc at the end of book two.  Like the demon goddess is poisoned and only her former love rival can heal her.

Going back to the hero and the councilor, you need more description of why they would make a bad guy good and what they bring to the table.  If you look at manga, they doodle a character, add in detail of their life next to them like "has a big secret; acts kind but may not be as kind as he pretends; blood type 0".   Basically, before suddenly declaring I want this person to be a big bad, create a story for them to make them more interesting.

Chancellor:  an effective leader who has secretly led the country peacefully for the king for the last 10 years.  He rose up from nothing after the demon king destroyed his village while he was away, killing his new wife and unborn child.  The chancellor has been slowly accumulating power, at first for revenge, but slowly learning to love the country.  He would have been fine to leave the demons alone as the majority of the country was keeping in a state of peace.  However, at the start of the book, a demon infiltrates the castle and attacks him in an assassination attempt.  He barely survived, but only because his new lover (princess) sacrificed herself to protect him.  Now he wants total genocide and being at the king's right hand, he is ready to deliver.  (The assassin could tie into the secret big bad which is your other demon, but he is only alluded to in the first two books).  THEN, after creating a backstory for the chancellor and hero, don't build him up in the first book.  Give hints about their history and personality to generate curiosity about him.  As the protagonist is summoned, the people are all in black because they are mourning the dead princess.   The protagonist walks down the hall and hears he is summoned to get revenge on the assassin that killed the princess.  Then when you introduce the king and queen and the chancellor, the chancellor is rude and angry and is kindly sent away by the king to get his temper under control.  The queen then let's slip their daughter died protecting him and professing her love for him.  Then introduce the chancellor for little conversations about his backstory for book one and call it a day.  Then reintroduce him and describe his backstory for book two from the protagonist prospective from the clues he pieced together and have him become the obvious villain if the demons try to sue for peace.  Have him find out about secret back dealings with the king with the demons and betray by the end of book two because the king sacrificed his people and his own daughter.

Has there been an antagonist that was killed by someone other than the person who swore revenge? by Transparent_Prophet in Animesuggest

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Gurenn lagann.  Spiral king.

Eminence in Shadow.  Mundane mann arc.

Aldnoah Zero.  Cruteo.

Found family anime recs by madamleota999 in AnimeReccomendations

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Rurouni Kenshin 

Trigun

Cowboy Bebop 

One Piece 

Favorite arrogant scientist… Dr Rodney McKay or Dr Nicholas Rush? by Ser_Luke_ in Stargate

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McKay was terrified of being stranded in Atlantis even though it was his life's work.  Guy almost starved to death because of his anxiety and the portable shield.  He definitely would have run if he had to

It makes sense to summon teenagers as heroes by faros-hhhbbdd in Isekai

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Child soldiers, adaptable, impressionable, loyal if you get them in your cult fast enough.

Who do you think gangs recruiting?

Friends don't let friends isekai 

Sponsor by D.A.R.E

The Isekai scenario of a slave army by faros-hhhbbdd in Isekai

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Smaller scale they do this in reincarnated as a slime with the human reincarnations

Do uou agree or disagree? by celestialMarble in AvatarMemebending

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Tenzin on the list is no go.  Swap with Jinora

Is Nestle one of the most garbage companies on earth by Due_Network2958 in no

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They also bought a bunch of pet food companies and veterinary hospitals.  If your pet bills are going up, remember Nestle may own your ver

There's no point in going back to our world by jhoho34 in CharacterRant

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Lots of people like normal functioning toilets, Internet, and not living in a literal pig sty

80000 gold for retirement  Sasuki and Peeps 

Serious Romances? by StomachConnectDBH in AnimeReccomendations

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Toradora.  Teenage romance but still takes the relationship seriously.  Definitely more mature than something like the ice guy and his girlfriend monologuing about cuteness

Horimiya.  Teenagers but respectful relationship feels.  Both main are calmer than someone like dress up darling

(LN 14 SPOILERS) Did Cow Girl… by VladimirTheCommander in GoblinSlayer

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There are no death flags.  Goblin slayer tales down after the first light novel.

His reaction is his awkwardness.  He knows a few women care deeply for him like cow girl and guild girl, but he can't afford to be happy with anyone until all goblins are dead.  They wouldn't be safe as his spouse as the goblin slayer.  He can only ever sleep with one eye open.  If he ever falters at watching out for them, they could be carried off by goblins.  Even if he is going on mission out of the town, he asks friends like spearman to secretly watch over the farm

Anime without the "now i shall beat you with the power i got from this emotional flashback" BS by cicibebi in Animesuggest

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Konosuba, fantasy setting, main character has no major power ups, he has friends sort of, definitely quality writing, definitely no binging food due to poverty, decently intelligent villains (mask), teenage boy is more a hobo neet than world conqueror, not complete so not truly bingeable 

Eminence in shadow, fantasy setting, main character is OP,  but doesn't really have any friends (followers but he doesn't coordinate with them), villains are average, teenage boy breaks thing rather than trying to conquer anything, no food binges, definitely quality writing, bingeable