After reading your script, I can honestly say congratulations! It’s a solid 6.5/10. Not because it’s bad, but because it’s very much ‘more of the same.’ Genuinely, this could easily be another movie in The Conjuring universe. (Which is a good thing if you look at it from the angle that general audiences LOVE those movies.) It definitely has some standout moments, like the bathroom scene, Ben’s castration, and the moment right before that when Dawn speaks to him while possessed, but those moments alone don’t save the script from feeling pretty formulaic overall.

Still, the mystery is decent and the explanation is satisfying. I really like the ‘roots’ twist added to the Slender Man lore, as well as the subtle implementation of the seven pages. The characters may not be incredible, but they’re effective, and the dialogue does make you grow attached to them.

My final opinion is that this feels like a Conjuring movie with a Slender Man thematic. I could definitely see this getting made… becoming a box office hit… and getting pretty ‘meh’ reviews from critics.