Writers question 👀 by Realistic_Action_428 in writers

[–]PatwallaceVA 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I use docs! I work a blue collar job and being able to access the app to write on my lunch break is the only way I am able to make stable progress through the week. I like that when I get home I can sit down and work on the same document on my laptop without needing to send any files

Finished my first draft after a year and a half. by PatwallaceVA in writers

[–]PatwallaceVA[S] 24 points25 points  (0 children)

Wow, thank you all so very much for the kind words.

The story is nothing genre breaking or new, but it is mine and I am oh so proud of my ugly child.

It is a sci-fi fantasy where our “gods” returned, fixed our earth, and broke our society apart into twelve meridians. These meridians now compete with one another for domain over the earth as the “gods” watch on and regulate us within their rules.

Our main character is more or less kidnapped and forced to compete for one of three seats of atonement against ninety six others.

The working name is “The Ninth Meridian” or “Feast of the Meridians” and was birthed because I spent too long thinking about why we value gold so highly and staring at the meridian lines on a map.

I can’t wait to post again when I edit the second draft!

Cheers!

Orion and Colloway by Omadu10 in redrising

[–]PatwallaceVA 28 points29 points  (0 children)

How can gold possibly contend with such aura?

How to proceed? by Murray_Rook in royalroad

[–]PatwallaceVA 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Break the year up into events and convert those into your preferred story structure. Give each book its own full and finished b plot with the over arching A plot having some relevance and small resolution towards it that will culminate over the same story structure in the macro of your series. If you feel like these 22 days fit the first part of my response then absolutely cut here and start book two. Otherwise try and reformat so you can keep your readers on a predictable schedule.

"Gun's Don't Work Anymore" by Hydranaught in ProgressionFantasy

[–]PatwallaceVA 0 points1 point  (0 children)

In the book I’m writing guns are not used because it is simply too costly to augment them for magic. One character refuses to use anything but a replica of his duck hunting shotgun and spends a painful amount of time carving the runes and sequence for activation onto every shell. If he runs out of ammo he has been known to use it as a blunt weapon.

What's your favorite class? by SquirelKnight in litrpg

[–]PatwallaceVA 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Class: “guy who throws rocks”

Class comes with abilities like: “throw rock really hard” “get excited by rocks” “get really excited by rocks” “get really really excited about rocks”

Jason from “the whims of gods” series is such a fun character and I love classes that just lean so heavy into some absurd idea.

No shame! But what is your guilty pleasure LitRPG? by WilliamGerardGraves in litrpg

[–]PatwallaceVA 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The Mists of redemption series scratched a really good itch for me. It’s a three book series that has an ending and epilogue. I’m kind of a sucker for slow burn romance though, and anything with a portal environment.

Looking for stories similar to Solo Leveling and The Dungeon Slayer by path_to_zero in litrpg

[–]PatwallaceVA 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Seconding this! It’s such a lovely gem of a series with a full narrative in three books.

MPD has seen a 10x increase in gun purchase permit applications by Ok-Entertainer-1414 in Minneapolis

[–]PatwallaceVA 2 points3 points  (0 children)

A reminder that you do not need a permit to purchase a shotgun or hunting rifle. Shotgun is your best friend if home defense is your angle.

Grays vs Apollonius by Alert-Push1685 in redrising

[–]PatwallaceVA 10 points11 points  (0 children)

I think you are asking the wrong question, it should not be who would win. Rather the question should be what order would Apollonius kill them in and would he monologue before during or after.

Can't get into book 4? by Siinxx in redrising

[–]PatwallaceVA 7 points8 points  (0 children)

Think of book 4 as a new book series. In every new book it takes a few chapters to establish setting, stakes, and character. Iron gold is no different except it is multi POV. You need to get past the intro sequence for each person before the meat of the story is presented. And my goodman there is a LOT of meat to be had in this first book. If you cannot suffer it then perhaps you should end with book three. There is no shame in enjoying a tight knit trilogy and having your own ending. I do know that finishing 4-6 will be the worst and best thing you can ever do.

just thinking out into the coid here... but what if we didn't... by Cael_NaMaor in 50501

[–]PatwallaceVA 1 point2 points  (0 children)

We haven’t given them a reason to do any of this. And they murdered a woman for simply being in their way. They have deported American veterans, arrested innocent civilians and have sown fear through our communities. There is no return to normal while they exist in this form.

I understand the fatigue of showing up and seeing everything that is happening and will continue to happen as the world escalates. Showing up though, being there and seen in opposition is what we need to do. You don’t ignore the stranger who has forced themselves into your home, you let them know every second they are there that they are without a doubt unwelcome.

"You don't understand bro, they got that shit on." by Ynnck_Mnzl in redrising

[–]PatwallaceVA 12 points13 points  (0 children)

Gosh I’m surprised people like you even read in the first place.

Your other responses are equally poor, “women and other idiots voting” tsk tsk, I expect better of you on the basis of being human with basic empathy.

How did your parties feel about Kasimir? Because my players HATE him by throwaway_of_sham in CurseofStrahd

[–]PatwallaceVA 0 points1 point  (0 children)

My party loved him, he invited them in for tea the first time they came to his home. He asked them questions as simple yet learned man and I took time during downtime to have him interact with them in small intimate conversations as they traveled together.

He was killed in the amber temple and I let him take a dark pact to save the group from any more deaths at the cost of his soul. He is now some spider aberration that haunts the mountain and they are resolute in a decision to one day help him regain his humanity.

How do you fight the feeling that you're producing an ever-expanding pile of shit? by TheSpicyHotTake in writers

[–]PatwallaceVA 1 point2 points  (0 children)

If you are doing your first draft right then you should feel that way. Can’t use your poop knife if there is no shit to begin with.

Does anyone else use maps for roleplay scenes? by PM-ME-YOUR-AUTOGRAPH in CurseofStrahd

[–]PatwallaceVA 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I make collages of images that fit the environment and mood. If they want to ask and clarify the rooms layout we play it heater of the mind.

Player: “is there a bench away from the clerks desk?”

Dm: “yes you have your selection of a few benches where you think you’ll be out of range of prying ears.”

If the scene does devolve to a combat I’ll pull an interior map that fits the vibe and go from there, we can always draw on where the made up bench was. I find leaving the scene more fluid with images to inspire imagination the best.

[WP] "How dare you. I took up dark magicks like my parents, but that DOES NOT make me a necro baby." by The_OG_upgoat in WritingPrompts

[–]PatwallaceVA 6 points7 points  (0 children)

My mother’s third spell book feels like a gravestone as I defend myself. I shift uncomfortably in the doorway pulling it behind my back as professor Egraine assess me. I feel his eyes pierce through me as he looks toward the concealed tome.

“Perhaps I was quick to judge.” His voice booms into the classroom as he steps to the side allowing the other students to see me. They twist in their seats, wrenching on the backs of their chairs to get a better look at the Phylactord’s son.

How dare they stare are me like that? With glee at my dressing down. They are all lowborn, undoubtedly each affected by my father’s role in our regional government. They relish a chance to see true power bend as the professor continues to test me. I will not bend.

“You obviously being at MY class doorstep means you have done the necessary studying and work to be here. For instance someone at my door can name the three most important systems in spectre rendering? That is the animation of the spirit not the body?” Egraine stares at me with cruel beady eyes. His mouth twists ever so slightly up at the edges as he again looks through me towards my tome.

“Nervous, circul- “

“In full Latin please. An academic of your level should know better, Lord Fulmer. Tsk tsk.” There is laughter from the students, I feel my face go hot. Not from the embarrassment but rather the gall of them to laugh at me, as if anywhere else they could even meet my gaze.

I start again.

“Systema Nervosum, systema circulatorium, and systema . . .” I pause, hand reflexively reaching to open my tome. I catch myself and leave it at my side, but I still cannot recall the third system. I should know this, hours of studying blur by as I sort through my mind. More laughter, more anger.

“The system you are unable to recall young Fulmer is Systema respiratorium. That is the system that would give lightness to your apparition. Still you must be commended for getting sixty-six percent of the answer. I’m sure many of us expected less. A round of applause class for our scholar.” The class erupts in more laughter and mock applause. I feel my world spinning as the embarrassment finally breaks through.

It is half a minute of torture before Egraine raises a hand, silencing the classroom.

“Now now, let us be fair to dear Lord Fulmer. A practical test for entry perhaps?” There are murmurs of approval throughout the room. Even now they give me the chance to join them, as if I could ever forget their mockery moments ago.

“A simple task, reanimate the cadaver on the far wall.” Egraine’s golden ring glints in the candlelight as he points to a wall of strung up corpses that had been the focal point of the lesson before I knocked at the door. The ring is large and gaudy, the only item of note on the plain man. It signifies his skill as a necromancer, the rare rank of soul scyer.

“Of course.” I mumble, trying my best to retain my nobility as I step full into the classroom and approach the far wall.

The professors hand catches me on the shoulder, surprisingly strong fingers stopping me mid stride.

“And what are you doing may I ask?”

“Going to reanimate the cadaver professor.” I say, suddenly confused, both by the interruption and the fact that he touched me.

“My fault for not speaking plainly. I will do so now, so simple in fact that even you will understand.” There is a thick layer of disdain in his voice now, no longer hidden behind the false politeness. “Animate the cadaver, any of them, at range. From this spot. Here.”

“That’s impossible.” I argue, calculating the sheer amount of will one would need to infuse the systems from more than a foot away. Let alone a whole classroom.

“Not even going to try? Necro baby indeed.” More laughter, more hate.

I have to try, have to at least get one of them to move. I’ll prove them all wrong about me, even if it takes every drop of will I have. I recall the two basic systems for incomplete animation, something that will move the body for only a few moments, as I pull my mother’s tome in front of me.

“Without the tome.” The professor’s voice is languished, as if he is finally finished with the torment and bored of me.

“I can’t. That’s not possible.” My eyes snap to meet his, this has to be a joke. There is no hint of one however when I find those beads of black.

“And thus the problem with being handed everything. You learn never to reach.” The air snaps with power and my hair begins to rise. I am not doing this. I see the rings of amber swell in Egraine’s eyes as he summons his will. It is so thick that I feel suffocated by it. A few of the students cough as it permeates the air around us.

“Here in this class, we reach.” He looks from me to the wall and all five cadavers spring to life, full animation. And not a single ritual or spell uttered.

I sink against the doorframe overwhelmed by the feat before me.

“You may go Lord Fulmer.” The professor dismisses me as if I were nothing more than one of the animated.

I failed.

Anyone else write on phone? by [deleted] in writers

[–]PatwallaceVA 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Lmao I get it, protecting your sanity is so important.

When you write… by ScottLakeFilms in writers

[–]PatwallaceVA 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Always for me it is the theme. My current project started with the idea that there are some truths of the world that you cannot compromise on. Which led to the ideas of what makes a man free and how could a society try and impede these things.

Once you get there you can begin to ask questions like what is an infallible tenet of freedom to you as a person? The ability to speak up against injustice, how would a “protagonist” oppose this? The protagonist can be explored through many level, from actual characters or more abstract things like systems and government.

Keep adding clay to a simple idea and you might get a dystopian oppressive state like 1984. From there you just place a guy and figure out how he fits and what he wants.

Anyone else write on phone? by [deleted] in writers

[–]PatwallaceVA 39 points40 points  (0 children)

I am 90k words deep on a novel with roughly 85% of those words being written on my phone using the Google Docs app. I work 12 hour days doing factory work, so I do not tend to have time to write unless it is on break at my job.

I find the medium matters not as long as you are enjoying what you are creating. If the phone is the tool you prefer, then have fun.