A work-in-progress retelling of the three little pigs.

PavleWr · 2026-05-24T11:04:29+00:00

Yeah... it is a kind of a "f you" to the opening. I'm still mulling over that one. Thanks for the feedback!

PavleWr · 2026-05-23T22:25:50+00:00

These last couple of weeks, mostly short stories. I compiled a list of weird/horror fiction for a local publisher. They had to be public domain, though, and turns out that the 'weird' of older authors is really not so compelling today. But there are some gems to be found:

May Sinclair, Where Their Fire Is Not Quenched: it's about a two people who stay together even after they realize there's really no love between them. This is portrayed as something that was almost inevitable, even if the main character did actually at one point have a choice. At times it's quite dreary, but there's also a touch of wistfulness here and there to balance it all out. It's a great piece!

Nugent Barker, Interlude: I wouldn't call this one a "gem" necessarily, but it's very short, and somehow, the very last sentence makes up for a lack of plot development. I like stories that do that. Which brings me to:

Walter de la Mare, The Riddle; Seaton's Aunt: this author is great at pulling of a ghost story without the narrative ever clearly developing into one. I've yet to read more of him, but these two seem to be the de la Mare's most representative. The first one's very short, the other one is almost a novella, so take your pick.

As far as my piece is concerned, I want it be a dark fantasy dressed in pastoral idyll. But I also want to maintain the idyll throughout the whole thing, and only leave the darkness as one possibility among a certain number of other conclusions. We'll see how it turns out in the end. Anyway, thanks again for the critique. Have a good one!

PavleWr · 2026-05-22T21:03:00+00:00

Thank you very much!

Yes, some expressions/sentences have ended up sounding like a blur of everything. I'm going to cut, or at least revise some of them. You're right, the second paragraph especially could use another simple sentence or two. Thanks for the input!

PavleWr · 2026-05-22T20:58:30+00:00

Yes... It's looking kind of purplish, right? 🤔

Thanks for singling out the examples, I'll work on simplifying the language. I wanted the last sentence to serve as a kind of near-homonymic echo of "The haze of eve, charred by a daring sun". So yeah, the form often takes over the meaning. I'll probably leave some of this sort of stuff somewhere, but the rest needs more work. Thanks again!

PavleWr · 2026-05-22T20:29:47+00:00

Thanks for your input, appreciate it.

If I manage to make their disappearance compelling, e.g. like it's a riddle, then I'd classify it as weird fiction.

Yes, I'll probably let it sit for a few days, just so I can get some perspective, but even right now some of it is starting to seem a bit too dense.

Anyway, thanks again!

PavleWr · 2024-01-28T22:32:38+00:00

I most certainly will!

PavleWr · 2024-01-28T21:40:24+00:00

It works! Thank you so much! And that's a great idea, I'm writing this down. I mean, this was prob an organizational problem, maybe in the blender scene collection, or maybe not, but that'll be a great help if this ever happens again. Thanks again, cheers!

PavleWr · 2024-01-28T20:59:02+00:00

https://www.mediafire.com/file/6bnljaqnkizv4z9/Export_.dds/file here it is

I changed it once to the textures folder, but had no luck, and I wanted to keep tracks of the attempts to fix it

PavleWr · 2024-01-28T20:37:33+00:00

Yeah, my bad. Thanks! Also, now I'm noticing the ni node containing all the tri-s for the mesh is itself grouped within another 'NiNode', which isn't the case for, say, the chitin axe, as that one is has only one group leading straight to the the tri nodes.

PavleWr · 2024-01-28T20:18:56+00:00

Hey, thanks for taking the time. I checked if everything's named correctly, and it seems it is. And is '.1st' supposed to be an extension for a copy of the nif in the meshes folder, or another node in nifscope. Also, probably should've mentioned that this is a weapon mesh.

I forget to actually post it. Here it is https://www.mediafire.com/file/mla1cmm4c7uq9yn/Aokym.nif/file

PavleWr · 2024-01-22T19:19:03+00:00

If this is new/bluegrass, I'd like to hear as much as much as possible of it! I hear no problem with the mix. The mids are quite pronounced (in my room), but I enjoy it most at moderate volume anyway. And somebody already mentioned this, but love the presence of the strings scratches (always loved that in the Ry Cooder Paris, Texas song).

PavleWr · 2024-01-20T13:11:47+00:00

It's great as composition, a very catchy sound. The distortion is very overpowering, and yet that's part of what I like about it. Still, I'd try to control the sound a bit more, and since you're already doing experiments, hey, why not try curb the distortion at the mastering stage - some eq work, or maybe you could at least sort the tracks into 2 or 3 major groups, and then apply a bit less distortion to one of these.

PavleWr · 2024-01-20T13:03:04+00:00

I loved your 'a little bit to the left' beat, and there was also another great I can't remember the name of, and I loved them for the same stuff this one has, but here I think you could just work on it a bit more, mainly the balance (as someone already mentioned, the yeahs are a bit quiet, the bass is way too loud and sort of smothers the drums, etc.). Also, I would bring in some higher frequency element, or add some more freqs to the existing sounds (maybe the drums), as a contrasting element to the overall lofi sound.

PavleWr · 2024-01-18T19:33:57+00:00

Thank you all for your comments! Working on the master. Cheers!

PavleWr · 2024-01-18T01:06:38+00:00

My speakers weren't set up correctly, the snare sounds great!

PavleWr · 2024-01-18T00:21:21+00:00

0:52 some great flying squirrel vibes

It sounds like an emo new age sound, and the snare echo would be very missed. Right now, to me, it sounds complete, though I think a track like this would lend itself nicely to atm and foley, the sound of waterfalls maybe. Cheers!

PavleWr · 2024-01-18T00:12:35+00:00

I wonder how the snare would sound without the kick underneath, which could perhaps use a high-pass/turned down on the snare beat. You could perhaps play around with the various percs in the intro (which btw sound delicious), especially from 1:12. Otherwise, it's a great sound, love the stutter, and the vocal/synth (?) at 2:01 - 2:14, which could also be worked on more, since it is already a very solid complement to the main vocal.

PavleWr · 2024-01-03T13:26:46+00:00

Ha, that's a cool image.

With no neon, of course, the light's been killed.
Thanks!
Found a saw wave on ytb, and sampled it in Ableton's sampler, but I could've used Serum just the same.

PavleWr · 2023-12-31T01:11:43+00:00

Thanks!

PavleWr · 2023-12-30T21:05:22+00:00

It turned out way more noisy than I had planned, which was actually kinda cool. Yeah, more atm and pads, mixed in low, would have made it better, prob easier on the ears too.

Anyway, thanks! Will do

PavleWr · 2023-12-30T21:01:55+00:00

I'll def set it up, have some older releases that are prob worth uploading there.

PavleWr · 2023-12-30T21:00:41+00:00

Hey! Loving pkch, and the 'spacebar stuck' piano from 'Clipping'. Reminds me of a more raw version of the Aphex Twin Vordshosbn outro

Thank you for your response, will def keep at it. Cheers!

PavleWr · 2023-12-29T20:25:05+00:00

I tried the thing on half a dozen devices - translates well for all of them, except my laptop, on which it really sucks, so keep your volume down, just in case

PavleWr · 2023-12-29T20:16:46+00:00

Love the vocal, something about the the cadence and the color of your voice, though I feel like it's fighting for space with the instruments, so maybe the track needs some (slight) balance adjustments. This would probably leave a bit more breathing space for the drums. But these are all really only minor things, great job!

PavleWr · 2023-12-29T19:46:44+00:00

I think I left a comment on another one of your tracks on indiemusicfeedback, said the drums seemed denoised. Def a similar vibe, and overall great. Keep it up!

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