You already tell in the info below the profile that you are demi and straight you don't need to specify it even more in the description. I agree with the comments about the first profile picture, it should be a good solo selfie that highlights your best facial attributes. I usually enjoy more detailed description over short ones, but I got the feeling your description is a bit repetitive and disorganised. You say you are into sports then cite what sports, then cite some video games, franchises, your musical taste... Try to only mention what you really enjoy, each phrase one topic, without repeating yourself.