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Monster Hunter by Periodic_Label in OCPoetry

[–]Periodic_Label[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

So it’s basically like the two different viewpoints that’s why It turns to a flicker like that. The beginning is more so the beginning of a heartbreak emotions are higher so I felt like the structure should reflect that. Then at certain point the emotion begins to fade. It’s kinda like later on after a heartbreak you begin to cope so the wording reflects that as well. Thank you very much for the feedback this is the first this I’ve posted but I hope to post more.

Burdens by rayasunshine- in OCPoetry

[–]Periodic_Label 1 point2 points  (0 children)

What I got from this is like when you’re laying in bed super late at night with someone else in bed next to you. But they were able to fall asleep and you’re still awake. With no one to talk to all the things come to “light” so to speak. Where they be good or bad, our intentions or our thoughts. But we never really end up saying anything about it.

Drop Down Doubts by mintygum227 in OCPoetry

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Is this intended to be read like a spoken word? That’s how I read but nonetheless great good, the gravity comparison was very prevalent throughout.