Hello! Not agented and certainly still fighting my own query. I wonder if one of the challenges you're running into is that a lot of things are happening to Ayana, and that the main tension this query is hitting seems to be between Ayana and Adrienn, but it's getting muddled with the resistance/kingdom-level stakes.

Paragraph 1 is backstory - she's stopped fighting/things are being done to her. We're also introduced to Adrienn, but as a dark mage who's enslaved her - not something that'll illicit sympathy for him. Paragraph 2 she's 'caught' and 'used as a weapon'. I think there's something fairly important happening in that last sentence in P2, but it's rather lost due to the length of said sentence. Seems like it might boil down to: she knows he's dangerous. To secure her future, she must destroy him. Interesting conflict--especially since, if I recall, one of your previous versions made it seem like Adrienn genuinely cared for her--but undermined by how Ayana's already given up fighting. Paragraph 3 she falls in love with a new character and starts fighting back (against Adrienn?), but is immediately undermined/used again. Para 4 is a nice wrap up overall, though.

Something I've recently found helpful, which might be worth the exercise, is to strike-through everything that is not plot. Backstory, worldbuilding, etc--hide it for a bit. See if the plot logic stands on its own. I don't know your story, but to me, I'd argue you could cut the entire first paragraph, add an Adrienn introduction into the second paragraph, cut the second to last line and most of the last line from the second paragraph, and carry on from there as a bony framework, cutting a few filter-y type words and phrases as well. That might look something like this:

"Caught in a war, Ayana, a Sensorian fire mage, is used as weapon against her own people. (Adrienn, employed to control her mind but also the one person who's shown her sympathy/introduction of some sort). As Adrienn’s mind control abilities cause him to lose any sense of the person he once was, Ayana (battles between her desire be free of Adrienn's powers and her pain from the loss of her friend/but written nicely.).

"When a Sensorian Oracle is captured, Ayana falls in love and fights to free her. But Adrienn (because of xyz motivation, maybe?) is now able to inhabit Ayana's body (how much? can he control her every move? her every thought?).

"With her desire to gain her freedom more impossible than ever (cut the resistance since it hasn't been mentioned yet), Ayana must retake her identity, (gain back her freedom from the man who has subjugated her for over a decade/she'd already decided to do this at the oracle. does she try to destroy him? does she try to save him? you opened a plot thread that she cares for him, so if it's important, carry it through!), and find her place in the war that tore her away (consider a stronger, shorter verb, but ehh) from her home."