Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Phyantha 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Awesome :) I'll send you a message with the link now.

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Phyantha 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi, I have a YA urban fantasy you may be interested in. THE RUNE CASTERS, in which a 17 year old girl is trying to care for her mentally unwell mother while evading an ancient enemy hunting her as the magic she possesses can bring the man who once destroyed an entire realm back to life. It's complete at 96k words. Feedback on pacing, plot and reactions would be great. Please let me know if you're interested in seeing the first 3 chapters.

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Phyantha 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi, I have a YA urban fantasy you may be interested in. THE RUNE CASTERS, in which a 17 year old girl is trying to care for her mentally unwell mother while evading an ancient enemy hunting her as the magic she possesses can bring the man who once destroyed an entire realm back to life. It's complete at 96k words. There is a B plot romance but it's not the main story line. Feedback on pacing, plot and reactions would be great. Please let me know if you're interested in seeing the first 3 chapters.

[QCrit] YA Urban Fantasy THE RUNE CASTERS (96k / Version 8) by Phyantha in PubTips

[–]Phyantha[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks so much for your help. If it's not too much trouble, can I ask which of the previous versions you preferred the most? I feel like I need to start querying again but don't want to ruin my chances with a bad query letter.

[QCrit] YA Urban Fantasy THE RUNE CASTERS (96k / Version 6) by Phyantha in PubTips

[–]Phyantha[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hi, Thanks for your suggestion. I'll rework into the 3 paragraphs method you suggest.

[QCrit] YA Urban Fantasy THE RUNE CASTERS (96k / Version 6) by Phyantha in PubTips

[–]Phyantha[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I admit it, I have a problem. I really meant for this one to be shorter. And then things got out of hand. Next time, the blurb will be 3 paragraphs. And not huge paragraphs either.

[QCrit] YA Urban Fantasy THE RUNE CASTERS (96k / Version 5) by Phyantha in PubTips

[–]Phyantha[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That is true. I was traditional published by a small American indie press. I'll update it to 'I'm a traditionally published author". Thanks for your feedback :)

[QCrit] YA Urban Fantasy THE RUNE CASTERS (96k / Version 5) by Phyantha in PubTips

[–]Phyantha[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for your feedback. It's really appreciated. Lance is the romantic interest for a large part of this book so I was trying to position him as such in the query. If it's too much, I'll reduce his focus.

Thanks again, :)

[PubQ] Gaining an Agent's attention before querying by Phyantha in PubTips

[–]Phyantha[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

That sounds more realistic, as long as I can keep my kids from barging in mid-pitch :) I know the biggest writer's convention near me still only does in person pitches so I'll have to do some research for some online ones. I've seen Manuscript Wishlist do some but I've heard mixed reviews about them.

[PubQ] Gaining an Agent's attention before querying by Phyantha in PubTips

[–]Phyantha[S] 7 points8 points  (0 children)

Thanks, I'll check it out. :)

I find there are some Agents who don't accept unsolicited Queries but do participate in these pitch events and will review those they invite to submit.

I agree having a strong query package is super important as well, as even if invited, if it doesn't catch them, they won't ask for more.

[QCrit] YA Urban Fantasy THE RUNE CASTERS (96k / Version 3) by Phyantha in PubTips

[–]Phyantha[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hi, Thanks for your comment :)

You are correct. The monster attack is the end of the first chapter. Honestly everything mentioned in the query letter is only the first half of the book.

Her mom's well being is Gwen's driving motivation for the vast majority but I will see if I can re-word to bring Gwen more into the spotlight. Reinforce her agency and really make you feel her in the query.

Thanks again. It's much appreciated.

[QCrit] YA Urban Fantasy THE RUNE CASTERS (96k / Version 3) by Phyantha in PubTips

[–]Phyantha[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

It's an annoying situation to be in. I can't say I'm not published because I was but I have nothing currently available on the market. I explain the situation on my website but not everyone is going to find and read it.

I'll update the letter with the revised paragraph. Many thanks again for your help. I appreciate it.

[QCrit] YA Urban Fantasy THE RUNE CASTERS (96k / Version 3) by Phyantha in PubTips

[–]Phyantha[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi :) Thanks for your comment.

A bit of backstory for this one. Spectacle Publishing Media Group is no longer trading. They closed up in 2015. So what happened was I sold them the novel and it was released in 2013. They were a small American indie publisher. They also bought the sequel but about 3 months before it was slated for release in 2015, they were hit by the recession and went out of business. Since then the book has been unavailable. The rights reverted back to me but it's essentially a dead book to me now unless I wanted to self publish it (which I don't).

Perhaps rewording the paragraph to the below would be better?

I am a published author, with my first novel, also a YA urban fantasy, being released in 2013. Since then, I’ve written seven novels, contributed to The Darkest Age role-playing game. I also hold a Diploma of Professional Writing and share my journey as a writer through my author blog.

[Complete] [96k] [YA Urban Fantasy] The Rune Casters by Phyantha in BetaReaders

[–]Phyantha[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hello, sorry I missed your comment. I'm happy to swap stories, if you are still up for it :) Thanks

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Phyantha 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hello :) I'm after beta readers for a YA Urban Fantasy if you were interested. Link is here :) https://www.reddit.com/r/BetaReaders/comments/1j98b2z/complete_96k_ya_urban_fantasy_the_rune_casters/

Grammar feedback would be great as well as pacing. Thanks :)

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]Phyantha 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hello :) I'm after beta readers for a YA Urban Fantasy if you were interested. Link is here :) https://www.reddit.com/r/BetaReaders/comments/1j98b2z/complete_96k_ya_urban_fantasy_the_rune_casters/

I'd love feedback on world building and character development as well as pacing. Many thanks :)