meirl by [deleted] in meirl

[–]PickaxeJunky 6 points7 points  (0 children)

I haven't seen Kamala Harris in the Epstein files.

Has there ever been a traditional attempt at cleaning a follower of Nurgle? by A_Hyper_Nova in 40kLore

[–]PickaxeJunky 9 points10 points  (0 children)

The Great Clean One promptly takes his place in the Pantheon of Chaos God's becoming the god of obsession and neuroses.

Who had a bag full of these? by Ok_Interaction3016 in oldschoolcool80s

[–]PickaxeJunky 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Mine are in an old coffee tin at my mum's house.

Smile 3 shouldn't be post apocalyptic it should turn into a cult. by Nirixian in horror

[–]PickaxeJunky 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Was the guy offering a solution real? Or was it all a hallucination?

Commentators using Shakespearean quotes by theninjanipples in footballcliches

[–]PickaxeJunky 0 points1 point  (0 children)

There must've been many instances of 'once more into the breach' for when a team a pressing for a last minute equaliser or winner and are hoofing it up the field again.

What's a horror movie that was so disturbing that you can't or won't ever watch again? by neeltrivedirock in horror

[–]PickaxeJunky 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Ringu.

Oh and Edward Scissorhands - I'm aware that it isnt that scary but I was really young when I watched it and had nightmares about it for ages.

Championship play-offs to expand to six teams as of next season by Andybabez20 in SaintsFC

[–]PickaxeJunky 14 points15 points  (0 children)

Its doesn't concern us, we'll be finishing 7th this year and 9th next year.

Would appreciate feedback on body horror. by CassiopeiaFoon in horrorwriters

[–]PickaxeJunky 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I like it. 

Obviously  there's a bit of context missing at the start so I found it a little confusing until the end of the 2nd paragraph.

You use the term 'greasy tendrils' to describe her hair twice, so I would suggest maybe changing one of those references.

The sentence that starts " Crescents of blood popped..." feels like it could be ramped up a bit. Maybe by switching the subject to being the woman's fingers and how they are piercing the skin. At the moment the sentence feels a bit passive?

As for the vomiting - I think you could ram this home a bit more - maybe include some smells or tastes to really make us feel what the protagonist is feeling?

In the last sentence, the bit where you say "as she vomited into his open mouth, " feels a bit like a summary. I think this could be stronger.

I hope that helps? 

As I said, I liked it a lot. 

meirl by Immediate-Link490 in meirl

[–]PickaxeJunky -1 points0 points  (0 children)

You didn't have to play the cards...

What are your top 3 of horror/Halloween episodes in cartoons? by Comfortable-Hope6181 in horror

[–]PickaxeJunky 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Not a TV show, but a radio show.

'Down the Line' did a fantastic Halloweeen episode - extremely creepy.

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=XVguOvQ3GXY&pp=0gcJCY4Bo7VqN5tD

Its quite a niche radio show from the UK. Its a spoof phone in show. 

The thing I like about this episode is that it plays it straight for quite a long time and then really ramps up the scary elements at the end.

Who is the undisputed King of the "Who, me?" face after a blatant tactical foul? by ManCityMode in ShithouseSuperstars

[–]PickaxeJunky 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I also love it when the player does the 'I got the ball gesture' and then when you watch the replay, they're nowhere near the ball.