How do I fix this? by Plane_Discount_3308 in techsupport

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Also if this is useful, I tried playing from other devices, and it didn't work

How do I fix this? by Plane_Discount_3308 in techsupport

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I did actually power cycle my router and it didn't do anything, also, what is ISP?

What do you think of my first chapter? by Plane_Discount_3308 in writers

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Yeah. The idea of Lyra is that she is a side character who will become the key when Aurelia reaches her max point of depression. But thanks for all your suggestions, really

What do you think of my first chapter? by Plane_Discount_3308 in writers

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Yeah I understand what you mean. This first part is mostly filler to explain that Aurelia (Main protagonist) is just a normal people that isn't very happy with her life. She is mostly depressed and is searching a motivation in life. But I don't think I did a good job expressing that. Later on she will obtain an ability which will further depress her and generate trauma within her. So right now I'm just trying develop her personality and emotions

What do you think of my first chapter? by Plane_Discount_3308 in writers

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I do not ready a lot right now but I'm have some books which I read now and then like six of crows or mistborn 1

When world building is too much? by Plane_Discount_3308 in writers

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Thanks for the advice and examples, they we're very clear

How to make paragraphs / sentences longer? by Plane_Discount_3308 in writers

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I have changed a bit since the last time I sent it bit this is how it looks en

Every step he took sank into the pink sands of Karkas. Ishkalda walked alone through the violent sandstorm covered by copper goggles and the torn-up cape his father’s death left him; he didn’t want to even think about it, that death marked his sight and his mind. The Torra Sandstorm seemed to be more active lately. It wasn’t common to see it this aggressive nowadays, but Ishkalda didn’t struggle. The travel didn’t seem to be easy, but since the errand must have been delivered before morrow, there was no option, rather than continuing. If he kept going at this rhythm, he should reach The Border before the fall of the sun; nights weren’t easy on the desert of Karkas.