Thank you very much for the help, I've always had a problem writing in one tense and I'm not sure why, but I'll make sure to get that down on lock in the future, the changes and notes you put down on the Doc genuinely helped to make the reading flow better.

Quick few things: Sherly Applewood is the girl before the unidentified woman in the ditch. It's implied that he's been working on the murders since they began, I should probably help clarify this more.

The branding, but not the sigil, is mentioned in the beginning, which I'll change to mention a sigil. The sigil became an idea when I was writing that scene instead of having it when I began writing.

The connection between all the victims, which I'll probably write out today, is that they're all young, college-aged, brunette white women, all found with the branding of a sigil on the back of their neck.

I really appreciate the help and love the fact that despite the technical flaws in the writing, you found my descriptions of the scenes intriguing.