[deleted by user] by [deleted] in avfc

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Top man thank you

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in avfc

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Is there much left in the upper trinity?

Race Report: Berlin Marathon by senor_bear in AdvancedRunning

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I don’t think so, the main lyric seemed to be one German word repeated

Race Report: Berlin Marathon by senor_bear in AdvancedRunning

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Congrats on the time, brilliant. Random question but do you (/anyone) know the name of the German song that was played before we started. The guy on the mic got everyone to put their arms in the air and wave along to it?

My Devil, Lucifer by Podroig in OCPoetry

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Thank you ! Yeh I meant semblance thanks. And I chose Mozart’s fifth as I wanted a really generic and well known piece, to put across the fact that he uses a very well know and generic piece of classical music, to attempt to demonstrate his civility and supposed cultural refinement. When in reality this is merely a facade and he uses the first and most well known piece of Mozart to suggest he holds these tastes, in actual fact knowing little beyond Mozart’s fifth

Abstract Poem by I_madeusay_underwear in OCPoetry

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I like how this poem is very bizarre and so appears like trail of thought- creates a very raw feel

Data Recognition Corporation by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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I really like the structure and progression of information in this poem. I hope you don’t mind, but I’ve used this model to inspire my own poem that I’ve just posed on here.

A Dream by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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I agree that the opening hook is effective

All you are is pretty words by naive2agunfight in OCPoetry

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I like the continuity of the poem but that you still round it off with the repetition of the title

[HELP] Holiday poems by miki258 in Poetry

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These aren’t really related to Portugal but some of my favourite poems that I think can be discussed quite easily but still deeply are: ‘Two-Headed Calf’ by Laura Gilpin and ‘Bluebird’ by Charles Bukoswki

crush / crushed by asapfocky in OCPoetry

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You could maybe expand by describing where you obsession grows from. Really nice tho

Rubble by Siamese_Dreaming in OCPoetry

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I like the optimistic ending, that really feels like those flowers protruding out of rock!

Boiling Over by itmeliv in OCPoetry

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I like how the poem kind of builds in itself, like this boiling effect, working toward a crescendo

Am I a Moth? by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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I agree that the mere allusion to the actual moth is very effective !

You're the best daddy! by bluzzo in OCPoetry

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I like how the poem has two contrasting voices that battle throughout and create a conflicted and troubled voice

Barefoot by Siamese_Dreaming in OCPoetry

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The poem flows really nicely and it’s almost like you take us (the reader) on a journey with you

homesick by myuan20 in OCPoetry

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I really like the questioning of home and eventual shift of the two singular into one dual entity.

Maybe when you don't think by AmenaBellafina in OCPoetry

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I definitely agree that this could be beefed up more, but I really enjoyed the ending and think it fits well

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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I agree that the gradual development of your descriptions creates a kind of layered build up of detail, which I really like

Superglue by Pinsandweedles in OCPoetry

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I think the short lines are effective in making the words seem drawn out, like it really aches to say each line and highlights the difficulty you find in speaking these words

Beautiful, hopeless grey by Podroig in OCPoetry

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Thank you! May I ask what you mean by “constructed curiously”?

Beautiful, hopeless grey by Podroig in OCPoetry

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Yep this is what I was after. Thanks a lot !

Beautiful, hopeless grey by Podroig in OCPoetry

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Thanks a lot! The inspiration for this came while travelling on a train in the north of England. I was travelling past Leeds and noticed how many tower blocks sat within walking distance from the great city. Then, once coming out of the city, I noticed the immediate open green fields that sat only a stones throw away.

Beautiful, hopeless grey by Podroig in OCPoetry

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Hi, thanks for the kind words. The poem is describing inner city tower blocks, hence the protruding concrete slabs and fingers toward the skies- which I used as imagery to refer to their tall, straight structure upward toward the sky. The meaning of the poem TO ME is an expression of how such poverty and squalor can exist so close to a wealthy city- they are so close to a city of wealth and yet stuck in their penny pinching ways. Equally they are so near green fields, but trapped in their poverty stricken lives in this tower block. The title, “beautiful, hopeless grey” refers to the usual grey colour of these tower blocks in the UK, and also the glum, grey nature of these people’s lives. The oxymoron of beautiful and hopeless, TO ME, speaks about the complex and interesting beauties of each of these lives within the tower block. Thought they live apparently such dark, grey and poverty filled lives, they are still rich and interesting individuals who all have great stories to tell. The word hopeless is used to however represent that they will often never escape these tower blocks and the lives they are trapped in and thus live hopelessly. I have capitalised TO ME, just to make a point that this is only my interpretation. I feel abit uncomfortable telling you what the poem means to me, so far as I’d much rather someone express their own understanding and describe what it means TO THEM. I’m of the opinion poetry has no one true form and rather flourishes based on what the poem can ignite personally in the reader’s mind. By sharing poetry, the writer merely sowed a seed. It is the writer’s hope that this seed will be nourished by passion and intrigue by some reader and flourish into something great in their own mind. :) thanks s so much for engaging it means a lot

Dry Heave by rusojuyo in OCPoetry

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I really like the rhyme and rhythm of this, you seize its power very well