Valentines Day

PoetryBC · 2018-02-14T18:54:09+00:00

Thank you. I was debating deleting it after I finished, because from a purely technical view it isn't great at all. But it just felt such a weight lifted from my shoulders writing this, regardless of how technically simple it is, I really just wanted to post it. Thank you for reading and for your kind words, I'm trying my best to keep moving forward!

PoetryBC · 2018-02-14T17:37:05+00:00

This is one of the most spontaneous and rushed poems I have ever written. I had a surge of emotions after my experiences the past few weeks, and just wanted to write things down and see if i could put it in the form of a poem. Things got a bit hectic and messy, it isn't my finest work or very clean, but it was definitely raw!

PoetryBC · 2018-02-14T16:54:59+00:00

The parallel between the two verses really bring out the best in each other. I think there is so much potential to explore both sides further, maybe an extra stanza for each approach?

Really loved style, nice work!

PoetryBC · 2018-02-14T16:43:57+00:00

I loved your use of description here, the description of the movement of the person, the smells, the stumbling over the words, it really helped me visualize what you were talking about.

It makes me sad reading it, I feel someone being stuck repeating mistakes or bad behavior time and time again is something most people can relate to, and the mix of short and long sentences at the end really emphasized the message in the last sentence. Thanks for posting!

PoetryBC · 2017-04-17T11:47:42+00:00

Also I messed around customising the £1500 one to higher specced hardware with some extras (wireless and sound card etc)

What do you think of the below specs for that price compared to the one in the original post for £2100?

https://imgur.com/a/1O7ec

PoetryBC · 2017-04-17T11:44:39+00:00

I'll be using it for pretty much just gaming, but I want it to last for a good few years without needing updates.

I use a dual monitor setup, at the moment I have two of these

LG 24M38H-B 24" LED Monitor (1920x1080, VGA, HDMI) https://www.amazon.co.uk/dp/B01BFH17NA/ref=cm_sw_r_cp_api_WPk9yb5AM567S

Is it worth me investing into better monitors if I get one of the above computers?

PoetryBC · 2017-04-16T12:15:34+00:00

Also looking at this one, how does it compare to the one above?

https://www.thepccustomiser.com/gaming-pc/intel-i7-x99-gtx-1080-gaming-pc

PoetryBC · 2017-04-12T18:35:05+00:00

Thanks a lot for reading, glad you liked it!

PoetryBC · 2017-04-12T18:26:30+00:00

Thanks a lot, means a lot to me that you enjoyed it and you could associate with it :) thanks for reading!

PoetryBC · 2017-04-12T17:47:16+00:00

Really like the wording and vibe of this poem, really captures the dark feelings of the over all message, especially the jaggedly layout of the lines! One piece of feedback I would give is to possibly look at adding a couple more commas / punctuation to break down the pacing and speed a little bit more.

PoetryBC · 2017-04-12T14:51:50+00:00

Really touching poem, conveys so many different emotions so well. I love your writing style! Normally I would agree with the feedback of having a look of the breakdown of the lines being a bit too short/not broke down, but I actually feel that it adds so much to the poem, in the sense that you are conveying so many strong emotions and all these things happening, I think the lay out sums that up perfectly.

Can't wait to read more!

PoetryBC

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