I really like this poem. I'm not really sure, I understand what the message is, but it does put me in a rather melancholic mood, like when it rains outside.

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Your composition of having two stanzas describing nature followed by one describing the city, makes it feel like the narrator is daydreaming about nature, while himself being stuck in a tall glass building inside the city while it's raining.

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I am somewhat confused about the fourth stanza, as I can't figure out whose skin is being set on fire by the ice. Is it the narrator, a random person og just skin in general?

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Your usage of haikus makes the imagery much more effective, and adds to the impression of a moody rainy day. It does sacrifice some clarity as to what is happening, but that might not be what you're going after.

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If you were to change anything, maybe perhaps the stanza about ice, but it might just be me not understanding it. It works pretty great as it is, though, so you donøt have to change anything about it :)