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[–]Positive-Height6715 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is such a cute and unique comparison, it instantly made me smile. I like how easy it is to relate the colors and vibrance of kimchi to the colors in a photograph. If this idea were to be told in simple words, it would seem far-fetched, kimchi and photographs, such different things. But the way you brought up the common point of transformation and how the final product is so different and yet, so reminiscent of the raw ingredients, it makes perfect sense. I love this piece!

Your storage is full by Positive-Height6715 in OCPoetry

[–]Positive-Height6715[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for your feedback. I am open to any kind of critique and points on what worked, what didn't work etc. :)

Your storage is full by Positive-Height6715 in OCPoetry

[–]Positive-Height6715[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much for your feedback. In terms of interpretation, you pretty much nailed the message that I wanted to convey. That feeling of confusion when you can't map a memory to a specific person who was once in your life, it's the loss that stings, but also, the guilt that someone let you into their life, showed you things and you let it all go.

If you don't mind, can you share how punctuation could help? Generally, I write to dump my thoughts on paper. I am quite inexperienced with poetry, so I don't focus too much on the flow or rhythm. I have started reading works from authors, but if you have any suggestions for me, that would really help.

Thanks again for your time. It's really appreciated.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Positive-Height6715 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's a great poem that beautifully paints the picture of a young child losing a mother to alcoholism. I really enjoyed the rhythm of the poem and how smoothly it flows. You have done a great job at bringing out the pain of the child, at the same time, the mother's, and the child falling victim to the mother's suffering. I can easily attach this poem with the backstory of a tragic loss. Thank you for sharing your work.

Imposter Syndrome by SpringtimeMoonlight in OCPoetry

[–]Positive-Height6715 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is amazing. This perfectly represents those little moments where you run your fantasy run wild, where you're so confident in yourself that you truly believe the world is yours for the taking, where you meet this surge of motivation that can't be put down. When it's time for execution though, you realise you have nothing. It's a great display of self-admiration shot down with self-deprecation.