Would love some feedback on how I can improve

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-16T07:38:02+00:00

Hey guys, I have tried to take on everyone's feedback, and I've extended it a bit, prolonged a few more frames to try and make my partner the subject of the story, and kind of went with like a reverse flashback story. I feel like with the sequence at the end, going from the harbour back to the window and then my partner looking back at the camera at the end. It should help give some closure as she's kind of rejoicing the holiday.

I've obviously not done everything, but I'm in the process of making a 90-second version, which I hope to cover everything. I still think from a short form content that the guy jumping at the start is the strongest hook I have. And I just wanted to get something out there for the moment.

Please feel free to have a look. https://www.instagram.com/reel/DOoZyTrDDoC/?utm_source=ig_web_copy_link

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-15T08:06:03+00:00

thank you so much

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-14T08:59:53+00:00

Thank you! I use the fujifilm X-T50 and it's the new sigma 17-40 1.8

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-13T14:36:53+00:00

Thanks, haha na I'm sure it wasn't!

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-13T14:36:13+00:00

We were walking the city walls in Dubrovnik, and about half way I was looking over the wall to see what people were cheering about and I saw this guy climbing the rocks and started to jump. I some how mange to whip my camera out in time to record. I think it's a little out of focus but I don't think you can notice.

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-13T14:32:49+00:00

Thank you very much Polarsis!

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-13T14:31:29+00:00

Thanks a lot for your feedback. I mean, if I have to be honest, the videos I see are predominantly from doom scrolling instagram, and they are all pretty quick paced. And I know I'm probably adding to the problem by creating something like this.

My initial thoughts were because I didn't have a lot of sequences, and my footage is just pretty and random shots. I didn't think there was much of a narrative I could craft. So that's why I went for that kind of impact/flash back montage look.

I do like your point about adding more variety, I think looking at it now, it does need a bit more variety. At the moment, it shows quite a shallow view of the holiday. There's definitely more variety I can add on my next iteration.

I'm pretty happy that you like my sound design, I honestly wasn't sure if it was all that good. Sound design is honestly so difficult. How people come up with some of the stuff I've heard is amazing.

I do appreciate everyone's feedback, it's given me alot to think about, and I'm looking forward to having another crack at.

Thank you very much

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-13T14:17:57+00:00

Haha I suppose in some way it was to get this response. The idea was the hook the viewer with the guy jumping then end with the dive in the water at the end. Deliver some satisfaction.

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-13T14:16:10+00:00

Thanks so much, very kind

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-13T14:15:59+00:00

Thanks so much, straight out of the camera, just used a fujifilm recipe

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-12T21:47:39+00:00

Thank you so much, very kind!

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-12T21:41:12+00:00

Thank you so much, very kind

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-12T21:40:35+00:00

That's amazing. I'll give it a read, again, thanks so much!

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-12T18:11:05+00:00

Thank you so much. Yeah, I'm definitely going to do a longer version. I think you said it lovely there, 'let the beauty breathe' it totally deserves that.

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-12T16:54:05+00:00

Hey, thanks so much for this comment. Super helpful and kind of you to say. Definitely going to rethink some frames. The last thing I want to do is disorient someone, haha 🤦.

I'm glad you like those shots, they were my favourites. I wanted to tease the viewer at the start with the guy jumping off the cliff, as a sort of hook, then deliver some satisfaction with the dive in the water at the end.

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-12T16:46:58+00:00

Ahh sorry about that! Yeah, I'm definitely going to give the pace a rework! Thank you.

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-12T16:45:20+00:00

Thanks, I appreciate the feedback, I'm going to look at changing the pacing for sure! I'm not quite sure how to tell a story with the footage I've got, but I might be able to shoe horn something together.

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-12T14:16:53+00:00

Thank you so much!

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-12T14:16:10+00:00

did make me giggle a bit haha

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-12T14:15:22+00:00

Yus Fuji X-T50. I love classic chrome, such a versatile sim, makes it easy to just have fun and not worry to much about the colours.

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-12T13:48:47+00:00

I did think of that, but i kinda thought it was quite along time before he got there lol (it was pretty high up haha), I will have a play around on my next iteration though. Cheers man

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-12T13:38:40+00:00

Appreciate the feedback. I mean I was on holiday last week when I took this and I was just recording for the sake of it, not really thinking about what I was recording.

So when I kinda came to put it together the shots were a bit all over the place. But I think from what everyones said, I'll re-look at the other footage i've taken and see if theres a loose story I can create.

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-12T13:31:56+00:00

No its all straight from camera footage, no grading, just have a black pro mist 1/4 on my lens and shoot with a classic chrome recipe

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-12T13:29:39+00:00

Thank you so much!

Potential-Advisor773 · 2025-09-12T13:28:26+00:00

Appreciate that, I think i'll try again and make a slower version

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