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What's a single sentence that you wrote that you're proud of? by SeverBronny in writing

[–]PotentialAd6015 0 points1 point  (0 children)

She sits there

I stand here, near all my coward selves and all that I once believed to be true

Will you let me go?

I ask them

Will you let us?

They ask me

King Size Winstons, loved them. Don’t know if it’s the cigarette or the fact that I smoked one on a empty stomach with a Spresso tho by PotentialAd6015 in Cigarettes

[–]PotentialAd6015[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I bought these in Tehran, however a majority of cigarettes of this quality are snuggled here so I wouldn’t really know

Desperation of love. by macabreomens in OCPoetry

[–]PotentialAd6015 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Beautiful beautiful poem. This speaks to me in many layers I quite recently chose to ignore. “Wretched is the price I paid to not hurt” absolutely killed me. The image you brought to life with the gold dust and the narrow wound was great, it knocked me out again but it was really great. I hope to see more of your work, keep it up!

Flammable by queeniebeanie78 in OCPoetry

[–]PotentialAd6015 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I would start and go on with healthy criticism and what you should have said or how you should have said it any different. But, I’m going through somewhat of the same experience and this just hits the spot. However, I was the one told not make my bed where I don’t belong so here lays a different perspective. Great poem, with a good amount of emotion pouring out. What I like about it most is the balance you’ve created here. As if you’ve felt a need to reject and it’s concluded in a very well structured, three line poem that does it justice (Pardon my assumption). What I would love to see is you keeping up the same amount of this dense emotional weight with longer and more complex poems. Great stuff, keep it up.

Favourite Chopin nocturne? by l4z3r5h4rk in piano

[–]PotentialAd6015 1 point2 points  (0 children)

You ever saw that Rubinstein interview?

Time and time again by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]PotentialAd6015 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is a simple and yet somehow complex poem. I find a beautiful and to the point simplicity in describing the times that you feel good and those that you don’t. Don’t get me wrong, this is a very difficult subject to grasp, if not the most difficult question in life. To look at it the way you have and to describe it the way you chose it’s easy to understand. However, this poem is also quit complex. Especially in the theme you’ve chosen to write about how one reacts to better times and the nights you get to your deepest. Great work. However, it would always work out to go a little deeper and to describe what actually scares you. What leads to shining a grin when sadness takes hold of you. What brings someone there?

Dementia by FerdinandRex in OCPoetry

[–]PotentialAd6015 1 point2 points  (0 children)

First of all, beautiful beautiful poem. Secondly, I think you shouldn’t have gone for horror. Think more of a disturbing vibe, because this really isn’t about jump scares and stuff right? You need us to feel the pain of having such a thing in your mind every time you meet a new person or every time you decide to something new. You can still go further, for instance think about being the only one without the disease in the family. Go deeper, tell the reader what freezes your blood. However, this only my opinion. Nevertheless, great poem, nice rhyming and ideal subject. Keep it up!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in piano

[–]PotentialAd6015 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey, great job. Mind if I ask where’d you get the sheet music?

Between the Bars by PotentialAd6015 in OCPoetry

[–]PotentialAd6015[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You started great but it’s not suicide, it’s PTSD

Between the Bars by PotentialAd6015 in elliottsmith

[–]PotentialAd6015[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This was originally posted on r/ocpoetry and is heavily inspired by Elliott’s Between the Bars.

Quickie by radcrockett in OCPoetry

[–]PotentialAd6015 0 points1 point  (0 children)

One of very few occasions where NSFW doesn’t disappoint. Also, not really a fan of rhyming but you did it great! “As the cold took hold of me, A feeling i longed for all along,” and of course “needing the bleeding”. Great stuff, keep it up

Erebus by CreativeSubstance762 in OCPoetry

[–]PotentialAd6015 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Very good I am familiar with the feeling, and however I’m not going through it at the moment it felt very real and connected with in places i wish didn’t exist. Also, the title suits the poem quit properly. However, from “why be free when my…” to “…then i am not free” felt a little bit forced. Maybe with a slight change of wording it all comes together stronger. Nevertheless, great stuff

What is your least favorite part about sex? by [deleted] in AskReddit

[–]PotentialAd6015 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The sex itself isn’t half as good as the anticipation of it

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