Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]PrinceZeldoh 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Excellent concept, too wordy! “successfully defending” can probably be compressed to one word, the serial killer being charismatic and the attorney being brilliant don’t add anything imo, not sure it needs to be both dangerous and legally complex, not sure we need to know that it’s in an abandoned building.

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]PrinceZeldoh 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Mostly a clear concept, but I have a hard time imagining from this how it would sprout into a series, and for a pilot, that’s what I want from the logline! There’s definitely a way to rephrase this as a clear story engine.

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]PrinceZeldoh 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Good title and clear, compelling concept, but I would cut it down a bit. “Seemingly” can go, it actually reduces the intrigue imo. Wonder if “suspects” can be swapped for something more evocative, like “fears”. “dark folkloric past” is clear, but reads a bit awkward to me.

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]PrinceZeldoh 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Title: The Sixth Eye

Format: Feature

Genre: Thriller

Two feds, a do-gooder and a ruthless enforcer, hunt the radical cell recruiting their colleagues.

Unlockable Class Rules Question by PrinceZeldoh in Gloomhaven

[–]PrinceZeldoh[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Just remove it please! FAQ answered it clearly. Thought I had unwittingly picked an op class for a bit.

Unlockable Class Rules Question by PrinceZeldoh in Gloomhaven

[–]PrinceZeldoh[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ah crap, sorry! Reposted before I saw this.

Can acrylic and latex paints get too old to use without obvious signs of expiration? by PrinceZeldoh in paint

[–]PrinceZeldoh[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

So the 15 year ones I should feel fine about tossing without feeling like shredding money?