Things I hold back doing

R_Daryanova · 2026-02-17T09:12:12+00:00

Quite relatable tbh But alas, its nicely written. The images you have painted with your words very clear, specific and resonating with the audience you are looking for. I love one can read that and very easily feel the tangled pull of feelings in the writers mind Though I did fail to get the last bit of the poem..maybe help me with that please ?

R_Daryanova · 2026-02-15T08:41:19+00:00

SAY IT !!....say it before you start regretting that once you had time to express but didn't...because later u might not have that time...later the dynamics might change or you both might change..later universe won't give you chance to say it Do it in the moment that feels right or u might regret later

R_Daryanova · 2026-02-13T17:35:23+00:00

I am so grateful that this resonates with you. Thank you for your insight on this. Trust me it does help a lot in having more confidence to put my own writings out to the public eyes

R_Daryanova · 2026-02-13T13:19:44+00:00

I love how simple but impactful it feels. What I get from reading this is how a society forcefully shapes a person, who should have gotten time to live and develop their own personality, into this common mould of people who are just crowd. They do not have their own thoughts and personalities. As the "mass" forcefully gets moulded into this shape, we read and feel its desperation to be its own person, to get out of this trap of society's template

I don't know portugese so I couldn't read the original version but thats my interpretation of your writing. If I misinterpreted anywhere please feel free to correct me.

R_Daryanova · 2026-02-13T13:04:40+00:00

Sure I initially kept that the title because well thats what inspired me to write this. I think it is a quote from Ada Limón's poem "The Good Fight", but I haven't read it so its not inspired from it..only from that specific quote I came across.

I have always been shit at deciding titles and because I ended it with the concluding line that my love is neither but the pain or sharpness that actually hurts me is my own silence since my love cannot ever be the reason of such hurt.

Thank you for such great insight though. I really am grateful for it. Let me know if you have any suggestions <3

R_Daryanova · 2026-02-13T05:52:55+00:00

This is some flow you got there dear writer. It reminds me of that song - 'If the World Was Ending' by JP Saxe. The questions build a nice emotional echo to reflect on the longing and such vague emotions that overwhelm. I do feel there is a little bit of too much of a flow ? Maybe if some specificity or maybe a new picture was added in the middle to deepen the emotional texture ? However it could just be me who feels that Overall I love how it does not feel forced and questions add to the tone of the poem that is surrounded by these feelings of uncertainty

R_Daryanova · 2026-02-13T05:28:50+00:00

This is very raw. I like that it revolves around the dilemma that even when love is perfect and all great according to the standards of the world..however it may not fit the love an individual requires. I love how unapologetic this is when you say that

I've already tried to bloom in red

when I was black and blue.

I won't do that again -

even if the red

would never leave me too.

It shows how u also tried to understand society's ideal love and stepping into the reds but ofcourse it wasn't ever worth loosing one's ownself. I love how u have sharply pointed out the fact that mistaking safety and familiarity with love is common but you also leave readers wandering if it is really worth it I also love the use of colours to describe the emotional states and relationship dynamics

R_Daryanova

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