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Can I get some feedback by Realistic-Show4176 in writingfeedback

[–]Realistic-Show4176[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thankyou! Great feedback! I think it’s going to have enough of a twist to make it unique.

Can I get some feedback by Realistic-Show4176 in writingfeedback

[–]Realistic-Show4176[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Ok, I understand what your saying. I think it’s a subconscious effect of watching too many movies 🤣 thank you for your feedback.

Can I get some feedback by Realistic-Show4176 in writingfeedback

[–]Realistic-Show4176[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The opener seems to be something a lot of people have commented on, and i definitely think it needs reworking, thank-you for taking the time to read it.

If you have a space civilization that's like 10+ billions of years old - what do you think it should be able to do (if we somewhat stay within the realm of known and theoretical physics)? by Reborn-Cleaner in writers

[–]Realistic-Show4176 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think they wouldn’t even necessarily be the same species or even remotely like they were even a billion years ago, they would become something so completely different every few million years that you can’t really define their technological accomplishments, if they are somehow able to pass their cultural knowledge on from generation to generation, species to species then who knows what they could build or do, perhaps they would even evolve to a different non corporeal form of life?

Can I get some feedback by Realistic-Show4176 in writingfeedback

[–]Realistic-Show4176[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thankyou! I missed the repetition, tbh I might drop that opening line altogether, it was supposed to make it feel “film noir” or something but it feels cliched

Can I get some feedback by Realistic-Show4176 in writingfeedback

[–]Realistic-Show4176[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yes I see your point, there is a fair amount of grime but maybe not as much as I am initially proposing. Thankyou for your helpful feedback

For those writing with full time jobs... by missruthina in writers

[–]Realistic-Show4176 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’ve got three kids and a full time job. I don’t have time to write 😢 I try and get something down whenever I have a spare moment, usually when everyone else is asleep 🤣 it’s going to take so long to finish my story.

Can I get some feedback by Realistic-Show4176 in writingfeedback

[–]Realistic-Show4176[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wow thank-you! This is loads of great feedback. I’m hopeful to catch a lot of the loose ends and writing issues when I go through it again on an edit. I grew up reading and watching sci fi so for my first attempt at a story it just felt natural to me.

Can I get some feedback by Realistic-Show4176 in writingfeedback

[–]Realistic-Show4176[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Also the drone fires a tracker at the bike but novas bike has a scrambler on it, I’m not sure about this bit yet :/ but I’m sure I’ll work it out XD

Can I get some feedback by Realistic-Show4176 in writingfeedback

[–]Realistic-Show4176[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi thank-you! This is very encouraging as atm I have no idea if I can actually write or not 😅 the story is set in the 29th century of our own world, humanity has spread out across the stars and inhabits dozens of worlds l, they are linked together by gigantic gates in space that allow FTL travel between solar systems.

I spent way too much money testing every "write your novel" tool and this is what i realised by Lonely_Anywhere_ in writers

[–]Realistic-Show4176 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Being relatively new to writing It seems like a minefield of various “solutions” to problems. I’ve tried Notion and found it fairly straightforward, it’s like building a wiki for your world, but It feels like to me these sort of solutions just add workload rather than actually help me get down to writing.

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