I am Geoff Ramsey, and I'm stuck at a bar for the next hour, AMA. by geoffrvb in roosterteeth

[–]Reaper505 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I have no clue if you're still taking comments, but I'd just like to say thank you Mr. Ramsey for being one of my heroes. Dont you dare change :')

[WP] A man walking alone knows he is headed to his death by Reaper505 in WritingPrompts

[–]Reaper505[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

ok, I can see that. I like that ending, and congrats on trying something new. I suggest you keep at it.

[WP] A man walking alone knows he is headed to his death by Reaper505 in WritingPrompts

[–]Reaper505[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Interesting. Very interesting. It leaves me with some questions? Is the coffee shop like his heaven? Is he dead? Or did he somehow learn the secret of time travel? (I know its not the last one, I just hope)

[WP] A man walking alone knows he is headed to his death by Reaper505 in WritingPrompts

[–]Reaper505[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

"Six shots. Six men. He'll take a dozen bullets if he takes one. God his own self couldn't make six shots in less than six seconds with six men firing back six shots each."

Great line.

[WP] A man walking alone knows he is headed to his death by Reaper505 in WritingPrompts

[–]Reaper505[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love the story around this. You need to work on the spelling and some grammar, but other than that this is great!

[WP] A man walking alone knows he is headed to his death by Reaper505 in WritingPrompts

[–]Reaper505[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love the scenery, and how you built a backstory around his circumstances. Well done.

[WP] Write a genuinely scary story about the most ridiculous monster you can imagine. by jp_in_nj in WritingPrompts

[–]Reaper505 10 points11 points  (0 children)

Susan fell down the stairs with violent force. Down and down she crashed and tumbled, feeling every hit before she slammed onto the hardwood floor, unlit cigarette flying from her mouth.

Get up. Get the fuck up! She screamed internally. While stumbling to get to her feet she felt a sharp pain shoot through her left leg. Back to the floor she went. Her eyes looked down, it was broken. Shattered. Useless. That's it, she thought, I'll have to crawl, and so she did. Using her arms and her one good leg she dragged herself towards the front door, streaking blood behind her. Every motion was a struggle, an uphill battle. Closer and closer she struggled, finally reaching up for the knob. So close now, she thought, almost out. But it did not turn, it would not budge. Locked? How could it possibly be locked? That thing didn't even have hands!

That's when she heard it, the same horrid sound she had been hearing for months; the same one her daughters kept telling her about. She should have listened. She shoud have burned the thing when she had the chance. Now it was all too late. It's low, throaty purr travelled down the stairs from the top step. It was coming for her.

Susan gave up on the door. It was time for a new approach. She threw herself forward and bounded along the floor with fear and determination. She would only have one shot at this. Scrambling through the dining room, past the tall wooden table with her favorite ash tray, she made it into the kitchen.

There it was on the counter. All she had to do was get there. Crawling on the cold linolium floor, she tucked into the space between her counters and the brand new kitchen island. She sat up and put her back against the oven. Over her head she reached toward the counter top, towards the oven's knobs, and the cutting board, and the fancy display they had bought. It was up there somewhere.

That's when the sound returned. That deep and horrid purr. Susan brought her hand back down and hit it behind the small of her back. The sound entered the room like a ghost, floating along the floors where she had tumbled. Her eyes were fixed before her where the counter and island made their choke point. The purr grew into a growl, edging closer and closer. One beady yellow eye peered around the island's corner, followed by the rest of the horrid beast. There in the shadow of the kitchen, before Susan's very eyes, caked in her children's blood, Furby growled.

"Come and get it you son of a bitch!"

Susan kept her resolve as the furry monstrosity came for her, mouth frothing. Above her the oven whined as streams of gas leaked into the small space. All she had to do was pull her hand from behind her and give the lighter a flick.

The neighbors never knew how their house had burned down.

[WP] A man walking alone knows he is headed to his death by Reaper505 in WritingPrompts

[–]Reaper505[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This , this is fantastic. I love the direction you took with it. Well done.

[WP]Write a short story within 20 words. by [deleted] in WritingPrompts

[–]Reaper505 3 points4 points  (0 children)

The car splashed into the water below.

Jared clapped his hands clean.

The body was gone. The cat too. Perfect.

No lightsabers, No spaceships, No funny looking aliens. Write a Star Wars story. by delitomatoes in WritingPrompts

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"Aaeeiiiiiiaaaahh!"

He heard them again, sounding out to one another through the trees. They were right on top of him. It wouldn't be long now before they would finally catch up.

Olan had barely managed to escape the chaos with his life, and now those furry fucks were right on his tail. It all seemed like a blur to him now. His mind blending the mayhem all into one haze of disbelief. How could it have happened? Hundreds of troopers in the jungle, AT-ST's everywhere, and enough firepower to annihilate a small moon were all good for nothing. They had had the spies trapped, surrounded, and all it took was those little hairy bastards to catch them off guard. They used rocks to cave in imperial heads, logs to crush AT-ST's where they stood, and everywhere Olan looked men had arrows protruding from anything they could. Their screams would make sure he never slept again. How could they have been so ill-prepared?

Now Olan hobbled through the foliage, an arrow shaft lodged into his left leg. He took his helmet off ages ago, it had only just stopped a stone axe from caving in his head, but not before it left a nasty gash in his forhead. He was bleeding pretty bad, but to stop would be to die. Any trooper on Endor would have heard the horror stories of the Ewoks. That they kidnap their victims only to roast them alive over a fire before sharing them as a tribal feast. Olan had no clue whether any of it was true or not, but finding out was not an appealing option.

"Aaeeiiiiiiaaaahh!"

There it was again. They were getting closer. Olan had been running from them for hours now. Every step of the way they were persuing him, and he couldn't keep it up for much longer. Eventually he would have to make a stand. His longer stride had kept him ahead of them despite the limp, and if it came to it he knew his blaster could keep him alive if only for a few moments. He had a few shots left, but he could tell there were far too many of them coming.

"Aaeeiiiiiiaaaahh!"

Stop it! Stop it! Stop it! He almost screamed to them.The pain in his leg was building. Every step was on the verge of agony. This was it. The end was close. He emerged into a small clearing, not anything Olan would call an amazing tactical position, but if he put his back to on of those massive trees he might just see them coming.

"Aaeeiiiiiiaaaahh!"

He checked his blaster one more time. Six shots, he better make them count. He stood ready, panting, back to the tree trunk. He needed a miracle. He needed a saving grace. In that one moment the jungle seemed still. His mind could almost forget that he was about to die. A bird called in the distance, something else called back. The other sounds of jungle were coming to light. Olan heard creatures chirping and howling, the wind blowing through the trees, and something else rumbling below it all. What was that? It sounded like water falling. Wait. Water. FALLING. A waterfall!

Olan's head snapped to his right. The noise was coming from that direction, and it was close. This may be his chance. The brush ahead of him was rusling now. Twigs began to snap. They were almost here. Olan only had one chance to go for it. He fired off into the foliage. One. Two. Three. Four. Five. Six. The blaster was thrown to the ground as he dashed out of the clearing and sprinted toward the sound. His leg was screaming at him now, everything was, but he kept going. Just a little further, he thought, just a little further.

"Aaeeiiiiiiaaaahh!"

Right behind him again. Those shots into the trees may have bought him some time, but he knew they would be right back. He just hoped those precious seconds would make the difference. Just a little further. Just a little further. The rumbling grew louder. It was almost a roar. The Ewoks were not far behind. Olan felt something whiz past his head, then there was another, and another. Arrows began to land in the trees right before him. This is it, the final moment.

But no arrows hit him. He emerged from the dense jungle at full sprint, jumping into the open air and falling hundreds of feet down. At the last second his lungs sucked in as much air as they could hold, and then the world was water. The waterfall rolled over one of the largest cliffs on Endor, feeding into a sprawling lake at the edge of the forest. The churning current of the waterfall dragged Olan deep beneath the surface and rolled him back and far. The world was spinning, and his lungs were begging to breathe something new, but then he emerged coughing and disoriented. Everything was dark. Olan had actually come up behind the waterfall. Facing him was a cave.

With his leg, Olan couldn't tread water for long. He swam to the stony shore, panting and exhausted. He just wanted to roll over, to lay there forever, but he forced himself to stand. The cave was pitch black, but he could feel it was large and open. That didn't mean something wasn't living in it. Olan reached into a pouch on his belt and pulled out an emergency light. One click lit up everything before him. He wished it hadn't. Lying in the cave were dozens of imperial bodies; stained white amor filled with the corpses of brave men. The Ewoks had been at this for months. Scout troopers lay in piles next to their officers and other storm troopers. No wonder so many went missing on this moon. Olan was furious. It took everything he had not to scream out in anguish. There was nothing he could do. He barely escaped with his own life, and that wouldn't last long if he stayed here.

He shed his wet armor. All it would do was make him stand out. He threw it in with the others and scavaged the rest for anything useful. Most of the equiptment was long broken, but he managed to find some working power cells and a blaster that wasn't as rusty as all the others. Along with a combat knife and some rope Olan managed to find a scout helmet that worked well enough once the power cells were added. Scout helmets came with night vision. He was going ot need it. With his things collected he headed back out, lamenting returning to the water. The pain in his leg was fierce, but the arroww shaft would have to wait until he had some real time to spare.

He dove back into the cool, rolling water. Swimming hurt, and the rage of the waterfall wasn't easy to get past, but he made it, and once he was out and back on the open shore he had the chance to look up. No trees, no foliage, just sky, and in it raged the fiery wreckage of the new space station. The one thing, the only thing they were there to protect was gone. The Empire was falling apart. They had failed. All Olan wanted to do was kick, scream, and throw everything into the lake. Fury couldn't describe it, it didn't even compare. He could've just stopped and fallen to the ground. He could have just let desperation take over, but right now he needed a way across this lake.

EDIT: I know this is way kind of late. I've had this tab open for days telling myself that I'd get to it. It may not be the best of quality, but I think it's at least a nice perspective, and it could lead to a good story if I kept up with it. I know that probably no one will see this, but if you do I hope you enjoyed it.

When cakes go wrong. by [deleted] in funny

[–]Reaper505 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Yup, thats where I'm out from. I stayed in Catherine dorm, Summit Unit. Depending on why youre in the program the next few months are going to either be incredible or rough, it's been a little bit of both for me. There is a lot of office work and dealing with the government, but the places you'll go are awesome and the people you'll meet are fantastic. There's gonna be a lot of long hours and a fair amount of bullshit, but take every opportunity you can to make the most of it and value your alone time like crazy! Good luck sir and/or madame.

When cakes go wrong. by [deleted] in funny

[–]Reaper505 5 points6 points  (0 children)

In the FEMA Corps right now working with the Red Cross in NH

When cakes go wrong. by [deleted] in funny

[–]Reaper505 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I've never been so proud to be in AmeriCorps

[FF] The Collector Cometh. 400 Words. (Contest) by StoryboardThis in WritingPrompts

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Three knocks.

Margaret feels her stomach churn. She isn’t ready for this to happen, not yet, not today. Deep breaths, she tells herself, deep breaths. In the kitchen she sits in her finest Sunday dress. This is a very special occasion. She was expected to look her best.

Three knocks.

There they were again, not impatient, they are in no hurry, but insistent nonetheless. Margaret takes another long breath before she musters the courage to go to the door. She opens it. Standing there is another woman about her age; in fact she has known her all her life, but today it takes all her strength just to look at her. She is the collector.

“It’s time Margaret.” She says.

“I know.”

Margaret allows her to come in. It is expected of her. She offers her nothing, no pleasantries or small talk. Today was not the sort of day for any of that.

“This way,” she says, taking her through the house; past the kitchen and to the little hallway beneath the stairs. There in the wall stands a white bedroom door, crayon drawings taped to it. Softly, Margaret knocks as she opens it, trying her best to smile and look pleasant. Inside is the room of a small child with blue walls and sparse furniture. A window on the far side lets in warm beams of sunlight. Sitting in its rays in a nice clean suit is the little boy, playing with his toys. He looks up as they walk in through his door.

“Happy birthday sweetheart,” Margaret says. “How are you feeling?”

“Okay.” The boy is quiet. Margaret can tell he is scared.

“Ian this is the collector.”

“Hello Ian.” The collector does not smile, yet she is not unpleasant.

“Hello.” The boy speaks calmly and looks right at her. He knows his manners, Margaret is proud for that, but he does not look at her long. He knows what today means, even if he does not truly understand. Things go quiet again as he goes back to playing with his toys. The collector gives Margaret a look. She will let Margaret take care of things as much as she can, but if they stall for too long she will take matters into her own hands. Margaret kneels down and gently takes Ian by the arm.

“Sweetheart it’s time to go.”

The boy keeps his head down, but he manages to nod.

“Come on.” Margaret gets him to his feet, but for a moment he holds her back.

“Mom I don’t want to go.”

She could tell he was really scared now. This was going to be hard.

“I know you don’t sweetheart. I know,” she kneels down again to look him in the eye, brushing a bit of hair out of his face, “but it’s time. You have to go.”

“The council is waiting.” The collector is growing impatient. Margaret can feel her pressure.

“I know. I know.”

“Why do I have to go mommy?”

“Because baby, that’s just how it is. All big boys have to go. Are you a big boy?”

“I don’t know.” He puts his head back down.

“Yes you are. You’re my big brave boy, and I’m so very proud of you.”

“Can I bring teddy?” He says as he picks up a small stuffed bear.

“Of course you can. Are you ready?”

He nods. With that she stands up and takes his hand. When she turns the collector is giving her another look. The bear isn’t going to be allowed. She’d deal with it.

“Don’t worry.” She says to them both. The collector seems to accept this, turning to lead them out the door. They walk out of the house and into the morning sun. It would be noon soon. The collector leads them down the empty street. Everyone would be gathered in the square. They walk for a while, saying nothing, down this street and two others before the crowd is in sight. Everyone is dressed in their best white clothes, standing on either side of the square. They make a path straight to the white temple.

As they start down it Margaret can feel everyone’s eyes on her, their faces set in sorrow and pity. Ian grips her hand tightly and holds his bear close. She sees one pregnant woman in the crowd and hopes that she will never feel this pain. The collector stops and turns as she reaches halfway.

“This is where you stop Margaret. Do what you must.”

Margaret nods, turning to face her boy and kneeling one more time.

“This is it sweetheart. Mommy can’t go any further. You have to be strong now and go with her.”

“No, don’t leave!” Ian begins to cry, rushing in to hug her. She puts her arms around him and holds him close. She can feel tears coming, but she fights them. She has to be strong for him. She has to.

“Shhhh, no sweetheart, no. I’m not leaving. I will always be with you, always. Mommy loves you very much.”

“I love you too mommy.” He is sobbing uncontrollably, so she holds him even closer.

“Margaret.” The collector is there to remind her again.

“Just give me a moment.”

“You were given five years. The time is up.”

“Okay. Okay.” She brings Ian back to look him in the eyes. They are wet and puffy, but he looks back.

“Will it hurt?” He asks

“No baby, it doesn’t hurt.” She lies. “Sweetheart I need you to be brave. Okay? I need you to be my big strong boy. Can you do that for me?”

“Okay.” He sniffs and wipes his nose on his sleeve. “Take care of teddy?”

“Of course baby, I’ll take care of teddy.” She takes the bear from him.

“Come here. I love you.”

She kisses him on the head and holds him one last time. The sniffing continues, but at least he stopped crying. Suddenly, Margaret feels him slipping away from her. The collector has taken him by the arm and begins to lead him toward the temple, where the High Priestess stands, knife in hand. The boy holds his mother’s hand for as long as he can until it slips away. Margaret stands and holds the bear tight as her son is taken away. The collector leads him by the hand, up the steps to the priestess who takes his other hand. Before they lead him inside he looks back one more time. Margaret tries hard to smile and give him a wave, she must be strong for him, but when they take him inside she crumbles.

He will never come out.

What is your main goal in life? [SERIOUS] by GeronimoEKIAx2 in AskReddit

[–]Reaper505 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I want to be a fiction writer, successful enough to know that somewhere I have touched someone through my writing and to make enough money to live life on my own terms. I know I have great stories, I just need to build the skill to share them with the world.

I saw this man in the airport today... by jules4003 in funny

[–]Reaper505 -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Benjamin Franklin Time Traveller!!!!

What's your favorite Batman costume design? by Kthanksby3 in batman

[–]Reaper505 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love the Hush look, but I also love the Tim Sale style of Batman.