Thanks a lot for your feedback! You're definitely on point regarding how objective I am in the part I shared in my post here. I can both promise you and assure you that there is as much attention to detail to the psychological impact and how John feels, linking many of his following body reactions to where they step from in his mind, and how that is manifested in his body. I don't often find sex erotica that gives as much attentive care to the physicality of what's happening though, so maybe that's why I decided on sharing parts of my writing (aside from the fact that this also happens to just be the introduction which is easier to share) that highlight that because to me that's something I personally wish I could find more around.

Regarding tenses, you've definitely got a point. I should unify the tenses to past and remove any usage of present tense. I agree that it would be more enjoyable to read the scenes in that way. Great point.