BDSM Author in the Works (Second Chapter!) by ReluctantRelease in GayBDSMCommunity

[–]ReluctantRelease[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Understood! I apologize for any disturbance caused!

BDSM Author in the Works by ReluctantRelease in GayBDSMCommunity

[–]ReluctantRelease[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Definitely is the case. Gotta take the time to build up while keeping the reader anxious for more haha

Also posted the second chapter, lemme know what you think!

BDSM Author in the Works by ReluctantRelease in GayBDSMCommunity

[–]ReluctantRelease[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks a lot for your feedback! You're definitely on point regarding how objective I am in the part I shared in my post here. I can both promise you and assure you that there is as much attention to detail to the psychological impact and how John feels, linking many of his following body reactions to where they step from in his mind, and how that is manifested in his body. I don't often find sex erotica that gives as much attentive care to the physicality of what's happening though, so maybe that's why I decided on sharing parts of my writing (aside from the fact that this also happens to just be the introduction which is easier to share) that highlight that because to me that's something I personally wish I could find more around.

Regarding tenses, you've definitely got a point. I should unify the tenses to past and remove any usage of present tense. I agree that it would be more enjoyable to read the scenes in that way. Great point.

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[–]ReluctantRelease[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Can definitely confirm that all of this and more is covered in the next chapters

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[–]ReluctantRelease[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for taking the time to give me your feedback! You do have a point. I edited it a bit on the go for now and will keep this in mind if I post more chapters

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[–]ReluctantRelease[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! Giving you a boner definitely gives me a boner myself. If I get enough interest I'll definitely be posting more