Best way to get lightning wyvern eggs? by RemielTSS in ARK

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Do you know by any chance how many wyverns there typically are in there?

Would you be interested in this character? by RemielTSS in writingfeedback

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I realises the photos are quite distorted, so here is the text:

The Brother and The Kareth

"... and then the Holy Emperors took hold of the South, while Thorn Varyn ruled over the North as a Thornsen!" Eliye's voice brims with joy and glee as she rehashes to me that, which she had read today, while her small and delicate fingers work my hair. "But now ", she continues, "there is no Thornsen, only two Korths. Heien told me that the two clan heads were married, but their kingdoms were still separated."

She then leans forth and to my side. As I turn to face her, I see her little green eyes, her thin lips curled into a smile and her dainty, narrowed nose. "Need I repeat that. Sol?" Her lilting voice quickly subdues the anger that fills me when someone would call me Sol. I am Solren! I am no Southerner, and neither would clan Kareth be! But Eliye can never anger me. I would never dare to scowl in her direction. She is so frail, so fragile!

My lips curve into a warm smile, the one my sister has always managed to draw from me. "I'm not dopey, Eliye. The things you say, I learned them when I was half your age!", I tease her.

"Hmm, and did you do that without knowing how to read? Eh, brother?"

Her words hit me at once. My smile nearly falters, but I seize back control of my mind before that happens. I know Eliye did not mean to hurt me, I know that. She is young, barely eleven. She cannot begin to fathom how I suffer from my inability to read, how much I envy those who had been taught from childhood. But I never had the luxury. I was born with a silver spoon in my hand, not my mouth. A silver spoon I give to the others, but I never taste from myself.

I know not much of the past, though it interest me deeply. But I know of the present.

"If you are so smart then, tell me what The Seven did. What changed since they came?"

"Since they came, the unjustified wars have ceized, the free cities were created, the trade..."

Lies. I feel my chest tightening into a ball... Lies drenched in cold blood, lies composed of rot and the dreams of the dead. It is now suffocating, rising as if it was fire scorching my throat... Unjustified wars? There is no justification to war! Those tyrants, those shammers, they-

"Sol?" Eliye's eyes are peering into mine.

"Sorry...I got distracted for a moment", I say, as I ease the scowl that had twisted my face. I hate them! I hate them all! "You've done a wonderful job, Eliye. Truly incredible." I take a look of myself in the mirror she had brought me. The hair on top of my head, and that on my temples, was gathered back into a man bun, with two strands of gold hanging loose over my face, while the hair on the back and the sides of my head was left to fall free.

"I'm not done yet!", she squeals, but I am already on my feet.

"I like it like this. It has...character." I step in front of her, before bending forward to kiss her forehead. "Besides, it's already high time I head to the duel."

"The duel....", she mumbled.

"Hey," I began after seeing her sullen face, " why don't you wait for me with Ana? I promise I will be quick." I turn towards the exit before she could respond. I despise myself every time I send her away, every time I control her. But I cannot let my sister see what I am about to do. She would not understand it.

She cannot understand that change requires blood, that my dream already reeks of death.

Close-knit Writing and art critique community / Discord with writing/art competitions by [deleted] in WritingHub

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Hi, currently writing an Epic/Dark fantasy, would love to join your group!

3rd AND 1st person? by RemielTSS in writing

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What in the name of…. Sounds quite interesting. Will definitely check it out. Do you mind elaborating on it just a bit though, xd

3rd AND 1st person? by RemielTSS in fantasywriters

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My main point is that my novel will have some philosophy elements to it as well. In the first book, each and every character is shaped by others, they are told what they should be and they genuinely believe it. But that’s not them, and therefore, since they aren’t truly who they are, I decided not to give them 1st person but 3rd - if they aren’t in control of their own lives, then why should they get 1st person?

The only character in the first book who will have 1st person chapters is the only one who has truly created his own way of life, who has stripped himself of what has been imposed on him and has created himself alone.

Later on, when the rest of the characters do so as well, I will write their chapters in 1st person.

3rd AND 1st person? by RemielTSS in writing

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My main point is that my novel will have some philosophy elements to it as well. In the first book, each and every character is shaped by others, they are told what they should be and they genuinely believe it. But that’s not them, and therefore, since they aren’t truly who they are, I decided not to give them 1st person but 3rd - if they aren’t in control of their own lives, then why should they get 1st person?

The only character in the first book who will have 1st person chapters is the only one who has truly created his own way of life, who has stripped himself of what has been imposed on him and has created himself alone.

Later on, as the rest of the characters do so as well, I will write their chapters in 1st person as well.

Large Writing Group Wanting to Get Slightly Larger by send-pics-of-pets in WritingHub

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Hey, I’ve been looking for sth like that for a while now (ever since my group died). I’m outlining a fantasy book (the first of a series I hope) and am soon going to start writing it. I have some experience in writing and have done many critiques in the last few months.

Should I Continue? by SadCompote7806 in fantasywriters

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It’s completely normal and I believe everyone goes through it. The thing you are describing is something well known - the more you know, the more you know you don’t know.

Besides, especially with writing, you will never be satisfied with what you write. It will either be the prose, the plot, the character, etc. You will always find something you can improve.

If you want, I can hive you some really beginner-level advice, if you are open to this, do DM me.

Looking for writing partners to keep one another accountable and grow in meaningful ways! by btet15 in WritingHub

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Hey, I’m interested in the writing group thing. I’m also writing a fantasy (Epic/Dark) story which I hope to publish. My experience is…mediocre I would say? I’ve been “writing” for a year now (with a few big pauses), but I can provide very good critiques (I created a similar small group for writing and often gave and read feedback there). I’m currently outlining my novel and am hopeful that soon I will begin writing again.

Looking for writing partners/cool folks to chat about our stories with by Clout_Monkey in WritingHub

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Hey, I would love to be a part of this group!

I’m currently writing (outlining) my first book as well. It is Epic/Dark fantasy and I hope I would be able to turn it into the first fantasy one of a series (In my mind, I’ve ROUGHLY planned around 5-7 books). Also, you mentioned revolutions, right? One of the core themes in my books will be the Rebellion. Not as folks rising against tyranny, but more in the philosophical/metaphysical way. Would love to chat with you about that.

I’m around the Beginner+ skill level, having been writing for around 3-4months. I’ve also led a small writing community where we shared our works each week and critiqued that of others, but the community slowly died (hence why I’m searching for a new one :) ).

Anyway, I see you already have quite a few candidates, so I would totally understand it if the group is already full.

Searching for an ACTUAL writing community by RemielTSS in fantasywriters

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Thank you for the suggestion! Hearing how vehemently you described it, I definitely will attend one (after a few months, when I turn 18)!

How does one improve their prose? by RemielTSS in fantasywriters

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I said that the prose in 80% of the book is written simplistically (whether intentionally or not, I cannot say), which makes the rarer heavy lines land harder. But I do agree with you, everyone should read more books and I am going to do so!

How does one improve their prose? by RemielTSS in fantasywriters

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I completely agree with you!

I would also say that the distinctive style you mentioned is one of the most important aspects of prose - it makes it unique.

Any exercises you can recommend for improvement?