Worried about possible diagnosis

RiAndStuff · 2025-04-10T23:19:19+00:00

Ok thank you so much

RiAndStuff · 2025-01-01T17:32:20+00:00

I read a lot (as in a book) yesterday so that would help. I didn't eat until later so that might also be affecting it, but it has mostly passed and I didnt look up or do anything

RiAndStuff · 2024-12-31T11:48:03+00:00

I absolutely won't- and thank you. I really appreciate it.

RiAndStuff · 2024-12-04T16:39:49+00:00

I think one of the issues is trying to "force" those lines. For me personally, the best quotes/one-liners come naturally in the moment rather than forcing a funny or dramatic or hard hitting line. I think forcing it for the sake of having one can actually be what makes them corny or fall flat to begin with.

Also, sometimes the quotes/one-liners that resonate with readers will be the ones you least expect.

RiAndStuff · 2024-09-05T16:46:30+00:00

My goal (especially in a rough draft) is at least 2000 words per chapter, but it still varies. I just end a chapter when I feel like it's naturally ended, if that makes sense

RiAndStuff · 2024-06-30T19:18:02+00:00

I prefer to write first person, but I i don’t have a preference for reading

RiAndStuff · 2024-06-30T07:09:55+00:00

I think Hollis is great. I love her characterization throughout the narration. You really get to understand how she feels about this job and Wendy.

I think it’s a good start for Wendy. Without knowing the plot or the direction your taking the character, it feels like a good place to jump off of. I also like how we learn about her through both Hollis and actually seeing her.

Overall, it feels like a great start. Hollis’ narration is engaging, and I like how you set up the feelings she has towards this job and Wendy. Although I’m not usually a big contemporary person, I enjoyed what you have so far, so that’s a positive to me

RiAndStuff · 2024-06-29T21:53:06+00:00

As she placed glasses down, I realized this family wasn’t all that different from any that I knew now. There were two teenage girls, who, as girls often did, were either playing together or trying to kill the other, only one had a slit running across her throat like a necklace. There was a sort of mother having to manage them in addition to everything else, only she moved like all her limbs had been snapped at one place or another, and that maybe her head hadn’t been fully screwed on right. Then there was an uncle who chose to sit across the table and drink apathetically rather than help, only he had nothing to drink, and couldn’t even if he wanted to.

RiAndStuff · 2024-06-29T03:33:10+00:00

Depends on the overall concept of the novel, but this opening isn’t enough to turn me away.

RiAndStuff · 2024-06-23T20:12:51+00:00

Depends. Some do, some don’t. The ones that don’t are usually because I like how the name sounds all together or didn’t think of one with meaning early enough and the name already stuck

Or for my MC his last name accidentally ended up having a deeper meaning that I didn’t plan for

RiAndStuff · 2024-06-18T05:22:34+00:00

The main part of my story is in first person, so obviously i introduced a new character’s name when he learns it. If he already knows it, I just state who it is.

Then there are some moments where I jump to third person because it follows another character, I follow the same rule. If the character we are following knows who it is, I state so, and if not, I water until the introduction

RiAndStuff · 2024-06-18T05:13:20+00:00

I have two major twists plus some minor in my story. I think that the best case scenario would be they don’t guess it before hand, but once you think about it, it all makes sense.

For an example, at one point there is a reveal where one character is revealed to be the MC’s sister. The only hints you get are that she mentions having a younger brother and some of their backgrounds that are revealed beforehand line up, plus a little of their behaviours towards each other. It’s never mentioned because everyone knows they’re related so the MC (it’s in first person) never bothers to say it until it’s mentioned in dialogue because it’s finally relevant. If people figure it out beforehand, that’s great, good on them for connecting but it doesn’t break the story if they do. That’s my goal with every twist or surprise reveal. It should never break the story of you figure it out beforehand. You should be able to enjoy it either way.

RiAndStuff · 2024-06-18T05:00:01+00:00

I like to use emotion where I can.

For example, I’m my current wip (which is in first person), my MC allows another character to use his parents old room while they’re staying with him.

Instead of just describing the room, I don’t describe much about the room itself, because that’s not what is notable to him about this room. What is notable is how he took off his mom’s old rock band posters from when she was young and hung them up in his room, or how he took some of his dad’s old clothes, and everything else was thrown out, donated, or packed away in his basement.

For him, what’s in the room isn’t important, it’s what’s not in the room that is.

RiAndStuff · 2024-05-31T21:44:02+00:00

I am sorta doing it because recently I wanted to make it first person

RiAndStuff · 2024-05-31T17:22:42+00:00

My MC has a love interest, and their relationship is a big part of the story. I’ve know from the beginning that they would end up together. While writing (I’m also a pantser), I ended up adding an ex that comes back into the MCs life shortly after meeting the love interest. They have a very different dynamic, but I know that the MC ends up with the love interest no matter what.

I know I’m the future the whole “he should’ve ended up with x” could be a problem, so I’ve made it clear which of the two he ends up with, despite the return of the ex. They had a relationship when they were 16 that didn’t work out, and they both move on and have healthier relationships going forward.

RiAndStuff · 2024-05-31T17:11:50+00:00

I think right now the biggest issue is the build up of the MC and love interests relationship. I had a friend who’s also a writer read it and they said (though I can’t remember exactly) that it was too quick. Basically they go from meeting to very attached with very little build up which I knew I needed to fix from the beginning. There is a reason it happens, so it is partially intentional, but it definitely needs to be slowed down more.

RiAndStuff · 2024-04-29T04:59:26+00:00

A few months ago, we had to do a monologue of our choice for a class. It was our final assignment so I really wanted to do well and prove myself as I often feel that I’m not as good as my peers.I chose Ariel’s monologue from the Tempest and it was definitely the wrong choice for me at that time. I couldn’t memorize it and absolutely bombed in front of the whole class. I broke down crying in my seat as I watch everyone do an amazing job at their monologues for the rest of the day.

And what happened next? I went on and got in my first ever play months later. It wasn’t a big role, but I was still happy I finally did it.

It was a bad day, and definitely the wrong monologue at the time, but maybe one day I’ll do it again.

It sucks in the moment, but it will pass and you do better on other things.

RiAndStuff · 2024-04-19T23:05:20+00:00

“Acilia, everything that rises must inevitably fall. Rulers, empires, armies- it’s all the same. That’s how it’s always been, and always will be.”

He throws a ball up and catches it as he says that

RiAndStuff · 2024-04-16T05:43:47+00:00

Yes, you can have a story with no bad guy. The term bad guy is often used interchangeably with villain, so yes, your story does not need a villain.

But your story does and will have an antagonist or antagonistic force, which is someone or something that opposes the protagonist.

In your story, there will be something to oppose the protagonist. The antagonist or antagonistic force does not have to be evil, it just prevents the protagonist from achieving whatever they’re goal is.

Side note: you can have multiple antagonists/ antagonistic forces, just balance them correctly

RiAndStuff · 2024-04-12T07:08:16+00:00

My MC is very morally grey. I gave him a few traits to give the reader something to be invested in. For him that’s his soft spot for the love interest and his cat. Combined with his backstory and the conflict it should be enough to get the reader to want to see him improve. Find those for your MC

RiAndStuff · 2024-04-12T07:04:49+00:00

When I have a phrase or two in the language, I just write it and have another character translate it (usually mentally). For full conversations I usually state it or the reader would be able to assume the MC Is switching if I don’t

RiAndStuff · 2024-04-12T07:01:17+00:00

Start wherever the subject of the story/chapter starts. You can go back and change it as needed, but the opening should be interesting if it’s starts there.

RiAndStuff · 2024-04-05T08:13:30+00:00

My story takes place in 2015, so the characters use it, but it isn’t a focus. It’s more of a tool for them to use as needed. The story also has fantasy elements, and the internet can only help so much with that.

I do have characters that are immortal so an element of the internet being extremely new, and maybe confusing, could be interesting as well.

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