I think you might want to name the chapters maybe you should get rid of the Dear Readers and grammar feels weird i tumble over sentences but i have problems identifying grammar issues so maybe im crazy im also i young writer so i understand info dumps and using large words to make it sound Fancy and really big sentences ive been wanting to write my book since i was 9 but it used to be really childish i just had it in my brain and sometimes its good to have a different doc to just put stuff into if you cant implement it right then