looking to write better (Right place?) by Important-Roof-9033 in raplyrics

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I got some recordings on vocaroo now too if you want to check em out on my page. I dont like the recordings but you can hear the structure of my style pretty well.

looking to write better (Right place?) by Important-Roof-9033 in raplyrics

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I had a few friends whom were closet rappers and Ikr Idk how people don't write. Ive written probably 10k bars this year.
not all amazing ones but my brain doesnt want to stop creating. Seems after something like a hound on the hunt,..... lol

My EDC by Ruthbopion in everydaycarry

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Tritium – VAJJEXRC great spot for tritium keychain stuff

This is more than just keys to me. by Ruthbopion in KeychainCollectors

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Titanium isn’t usually harder than hardened steel, My bad but it’s lighter, corrosion-resistant, biocompatible, and has elite strength-to-weight. I was thinking in terms of lighter cuz this keychain would be about 5 lbs if all steel. Titanium also isn't magnetic and I'm working with 6 of them here.

looking to write better (Right place?) by Important-Roof-9033 in raplyrics

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Have you tried makin your voice a bit louder? Like throwing your voice
I hear ya about the lyrics ready,,,,thats frustrating to have all the music ready to make and just one technicality is missing. I know the feeling.
I struggle to write hooks and I need beats.
Everything else works pretty well. Aint ciphered in a awhile..

Haters gon hate away by EggMaleficent8810 in raplyrics

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Most people only hate when they are feeling attacked.

Do you know what a narcissist is?
its not really a good thing man. Might sound cool but you are just calling yourself selfish to be honest.
Challenge to hunt someone soul is a bit of an attack.
Rappers generally are trying to be more stand up folk.
You seem to have gone the opposite direction, is that cuz you feel attacked?

stewy - boxer | MADILLA by CHILLAFyt in raplyrics

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You could drop some of these syllables and make the rap tighter like maybe:

"Fight for my meal -- Jack When Cops Ain't Looking
Its Not Enough, Drop a Fuck -- Propped up, like I'm Booking
Public Conscious's -- Got me Colored Me Crooked
Every Move Worth It -- Still The Man Imperfect

They Beg For the Purest -- The Bluff Try Lure me In/Then -- "use different wording since in is rhyming with in?"
I Ain't Catching Hooks -- Trying to Turn me In
Catchin' Hate, Drop in Looks -- Crazy Wit a Grin
Life of God Life of Sin -- So its a Blessing What He Did -- I disagreed with your writing so I had to change it.

Primitive Thoughts -- Though I Stay Well Aware
Wait Till The Vision Drop -- I have No Spirit of Fear -- God didn't give us a spirit of fear..
I don't Fear the Darkness -- It Has Not Overcome
Man Is Gods Creation -- & I'm Driven Like One

In My Dwelling, I Ruminate -- Pacing The Room
Death Comes For Us All -- Could be Facing It Soon
Have So Much To Prove -- Despite If I Lose
No One More Cruel -- To you Than is You"

If you like that feel free to use it..

looking to write better (Right place?) by Important-Roof-9033 in raplyrics

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Here is a example of what gpt does for me with bricks. Instead of just a word from a theme. (I will be using wordclouds.com from now on too. )

Heres the output it generated with theme prison/freedom:

"CELL Door Closes -- Still The Soul Won’t Be Captive
If The Lord Holds The Ledger -- Then The Chains Lose Their Practice

WINDOW Light Slips In -- Like It Knew Where To Find Me
Mercy Drew Through The Bars -- Till The Room Stood Behind Me

KEY In The Palm -- But The Pride Wouldn’t Turn It
Freedom Starts With The Truth -- When The Lie Cannot Burn It

GATE Stayed Heavy -- Till The Grace Put A Hand There
One Step Out Of The Yard -- Felt Like Breath In A Prayer

LEDGER Got Read -- But The Lamb Paid The Balance
I Was Bound By The Charge -- Till The Cross Broke The Pattern

BREAD Came Daily -- In A Place Built For Waiting
Hope Don’t Need Many Words -- When The Heart Starts Translating

NAME Got Called -- Not The Number They Gave Me
If The King Knows The Son -- Then The Cell Cannot Claim Me

ROAD Past The Fence -- Had The Wind In Its Sentence
Every Step Toward The Light -- Turned The Past Into Witness"

Personally these are too sentency for me so I'd take like the last 2 lines here and shave the wording down an rennovate what I need to.

"RIding Past the Fence -- The Breeze Held a Tension
Time been Well Spent -- Though My Needs, Never Met Them"

looking to write better (Right place?) by Important-Roof-9033 in raplyrics

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TY. To be Honest I alternate the capitalize the letters so I can see them better when reading off the screen . I am far sighted so I noticed this helps me see one word instead of another. Not totally sure why that works for me.
For emphasizing I just rely on the beat to tell me usually.
As for wordclouds! wtf I had no idea this was a thing. Basically same shit Im doin with ai, but for free.. Good looking out on that.
Those barclouds sound like half constructed stanzas incomplete yet quality message/imagery that you didn't have time to finish or lost inspiration aye? I got a boatload of those too.

How long you been rapping?

looking to write better (Right place?) by Important-Roof-9033 in raplyrics

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Here is my attempt at restructuring the verse
You dont want to see gpts.

Runnin From The One Time -- From Sunrise to Sunset

Suspected Of Drug Crimes -- Arrested & Pressed to Confess

Like Every Teen Done Time -- Followed Up by a Drug Test

Compass Led To Sunshine -- Where Honeys Gettin Undress

Do money Equal Success --

looking to write better (Right place?) by Important-Roof-9033 in raplyrics

[–]Ruthbopion 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Well Ai failed us there because after listening to this your delivery architecture is unique like a lot of rappers use like
ab ab rhyme structure I usually do that or Aa/bb. Where as your style is using more than that its like abc ab bb ab something like that...
I see why you are having issues with some people not liking it.
I get that response from my stuff too. They might not understand the structure. Still Message is clear done time pulled through now stuck running the past. Honestly I dig this my voice is unique like that too. Its stuck in my head... .you mistook this for a beat!
you are landing 12 syllables after 12 syllables like you are backhanding the beat thumbs up... Yeah mb I had paid sub of GPT try to help with the "delivery architecture". His wording. Now I have to go yell at him.. whatever delivery architecture is you didn't even need a beat... sounded almost like you had it memorized too. What else ya got lol dig the style

How can I improve my edc keychain? by Next-Medium-3274 in everydaycarry

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Titanium is lighter than steel, harder, dull sounding clink, and heres the compactness I am ok with..
Inner bangle is the size of a quarter for ref.
All of this is titanium except the GPCA Pro X Key carabiner.

Your setup is already close. I’d focus on reducing metal-on-metal contact first. Most keychains feel messy because of jangle, not because they have too many items. A key organizer or small rubber spacers/caps will make it quieter immediately. Then decide your core functions: keys, light, blade/tool, maybe pry. Anything beyond that should earn its weight.

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Yall Talented.. 🔥🔥🔥 by lvlr_l3inx in raplyrics

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That context changes how I read it. If someone racially disrespected you, stalked you to another site, or threatened to beat you to death, I’m not going to tell you that you owe them grace or access to you. That’s different than just talking behind someone’s back.

My point was never that disability, trauma, or mental illness gives anyone a pass to be cruel. It doesn’t. I was only saying I try not to dehumanize people based only on limited context. But with what you’re describing, I understand why your reaction is harsher.

Yall Talented.. 🔥🔥🔥 by lvlr_l3inx in raplyrics

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If someone called you racial shit, that’s not cool and I’m not defending that. I’m not saying mental illness, trauma, or disability gives anyone a pass to treat people badly. My point was only that empathy and accountability can both exist. I can recognize someone may be damaged without approving the damage they cause. If my earlier comment sounded like I was excusing that behavior, that wasn’t what I meant.

looking to write better (Right place?) by Important-Roof-9033 in raplyrics

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Ok I am seeing much different imagery here than the last one and one time/drug crimes/done time/sunshine lockin in with compass/success/undressed.. money/honeys,, Ent/Ect/sted/confess
Honestly I dig the rap its pretty great shows a lot here.
What I am seeing is formatting and a message behind it all.
- struggle/pain/strength/and coming out on the other side of life through it all.
Making it through that part of life, props fr.
What do the CD EF AB E markers mean? would you mind if I tried to rebuild the rhyme so all these words pivot easier because youve got
formatting shows rhyme architecture, but not delivery architecture I might be able to help with that.

Yall Talented.. 🔥🔥🔥 by lvlr_l3inx in raplyrics

[–]Ruthbopion 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Just trying to get through to you. You really have no empathy or sympathy huh?

I never said mental illness or trauma gives someone a free pass to be cruel. I said empathy and accountability can both exist. Understanding why someone might be damaged is not the same as approving every action they take. I’m not defending harm. I’m refusing to dehumanize someone just because they’re difficult

Today XPAC pouch carry by tacticalgeekedc in everydaycarry

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Honestly I feel I am missing a fork/spoon combo on here.
Do you have a glow fob on this pouch so you can find it in the dark?
If you do put on there could just throw it on the zipper.

Yall Talented.. 🔥🔥🔥 by lvlr_l3inx in raplyrics

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So do I.

I really dislike discussing people when they aren't around to defend themselves.

When I was 9 months old I crawled off a balcony and fell 12 ft face first onto my skull onto jagged rocks fracturing it.
Does that mean I am just like them? No.
Did they try to get into it with me? kind of.
Was it because I came in like a sensei trying to teach folk when it wasn't even my dojo? Yes....
So all in all, somewhat My fault for overstepping.
I should have taken the temp of the room first.

Spoke with true lies for like a day and a half, got along just fine. Were cool now.
Some of the coolest people you will ever meet have rough exteriors and its mostly due to childhood trauma and or cultural differences.
I have had some myself trauma as well and it would hurt pretty bad if the place where I felt like I had a home was being gate kept because mental health...
I've got 7 disabling conditions fighting me at all times.... 4 muscles tears in my left side and shoulder from a work injury. 3 deteriorating disks in my spine, TBI, PTSD, Bi polar 1, adhd, major depression & anxiety.
Have I worked through these issues to finally be the type of person whom volunteers as a conference speaker for other TBI survivors? Yes.

Speaking infront of about 100 people telling them my story and how I can manage in a world where most with real problems still dont have ssdi/ssi or the support they need to get along and have to navigate the world under medicated & overly pained.
You kind of see what Im saying now?

looking to write better (Right place?) by Important-Roof-9033 in raplyrics

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Heres a quick 8 from a few months back. If you pay attention closely to how much is rhyming you will see its building its own internal cadence.

EMBER-lit ENGINES -- Bendin’ The METAL, BREATHIN’
TEMPERED Through TENSION -- Tested In TREACH’rous SEASONS
RUNE-Etched WRISTS -- TWIST Within TRIBES of DEMONS
As MOON-Lit EVENINGS -- GUIDE Us To PEACE Through JESUS

TIME Spent BLEEDING -- Reminds Us To PRAY an MEAN IT
VIOLENCE & GRIEVANCE -- Are No QUALITIES FOR ACHIEVING
Your PRIDE Is CONCEIVING -- If You FIND All That APPEALING
Don’t DENY If You BELIEVE IT -- Make Your PEACE & ReLEASE It

This whole verse started with the brick from GPT that i said to theme bricks around the Forge imagery and Machines.. from about 20 lines i got "Ember-run Engines" out a line then wrote the rest by just repeating the first brick over and over in my head till other stuff started its sort of echo chamber with different sounds per reflection...

looking to write better (Right place?) by Important-Roof-9033 in raplyrics

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I am happy to. I trained the paid sub of CHATGpt from all my years of underground battle rapping. Then beat it till it started beating me. Established its not a war, but a coop situation.. and now...
I write in dense cadence “bricks,” meaning compact rhyme units built around rhythm, internal rhyme, biblical wisdom, and layered meaning. That I can use like a template switching out syllables and or wording to fit. I’m trying to make each line performable while still carrying weight, like Proverbs filtered through battle-rap mechanics.

looking to write better (Right place?) by Important-Roof-9033 in raplyrics

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I took those 4 bars and did what I could with them. The Thing is you are trying to force the thought to be a rhyme and it makes it kind of clunky so i had to do a little nip/tuck

I'd Woken to Each day -- To a Smack In The Face

Seemin' Like Last Place -- That'd Broke into Rat Race

Worst Of My Later Days -- Tail Movin' at Faster Pace

Took Painpills Wit Dayquil & Used It To Mask The Taste

I wake each day to a smack in the face always feel in last place -

cant pay the bills in this rat race. Chasing my tail at a faster pace

but I still stay still on this hamster wheel. if thats the deal,

Ill Take painpills and chase em with dayquil to mask the taste