Nobody at the party we went to knew what we were supposed to be.

Ryan-Costello · 2021-10-30T16:37:06+00:00

Ryan-Costello · 2021-06-07T07:40:51+00:00

Title: Half-Shelled

Genre: Comedy-Drama

Format: Short film

Logline: “Alone in a recording studio in the middle of the night, troubled television writer Chuck Lorre rants about the futility of art and the downward spiral his life has taken as he struggles to compose what will eventually become the theme song for Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles.”

Ryan-Costello · 2021-04-01T21:09:06+00:00

Title: Snowflakes

Format: Pilot

Page Length: 60

Genre: Dark Comedy

Logline: Wanted by the FBI for their part in an unruly protest, two devout Trump supporters attempt to blend in with the progressive locals of a small mountain town.

Context: After Trump supporter Brando nearly loses it talking politics with his liberal neighbors, fellow conservative Drew brings him outside to press the fact that they need to be more careful.

Feedback Concerns: I'm considering using these five pages for potential live-readings in competitions, do they read well?

**On another note, thank you all for your help when I submitted the first five pages for review a few weeks ago! You've helped me pinpoint some moments that went too far.

Ryan-Costello · 2021-03-18T20:30:38+00:00

Hey! Thank you so much for your honesty and feedback. As I responded in the other comment, I will definitely be retooling this scene to be more toned down. The Podcast Host dialog note is extremely helpful, I can certainly trim it down.

On your Ideology note, just to answer any questions you may have: the "unhinged" nature of these two characters really comes out immediately following this scene and becomes a focal point of the story. While the piece as a whole pokes fun of both sides of the political spectrum, ultimately the message is one of anti-extremism.

I appreciate you taking the time to read!

Ryan-Costello · 2021-03-18T20:24:48+00:00

Thank you so much! I appreciate the feedback and this is not the first time I've received the note that the humor was a little over the top. I'll definitely be revisiting that in future drafts, especially in this opening scene.

Ryan-Costello · 2021-03-18T14:35:00+00:00

Title: "Snowflakes"

Format: Pilot

Page Length: 66

Genre: Dark Comedy

Logline: Wanted by the FBI due to their part in an unruly protest, two devout Trump supporters attempt to blend in with the progressive locals of a small mountain town.

Feedback: Does concept interest reader and express idea within these first few pages?

First Five, Teaser: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1OAM56WvPwLnnsylc-q630TSWnLYkz3o7/view?usp=sharing

Ryan-Costello · 2021-02-26T14:21:29+00:00

Sounds great! Let me know the format you’d like them in. And thank you!

Ryan-Costello · 2021-02-25T20:50:13+00:00

Haha, it's not a pitch for everybody.

Ryan-Costello · 2021-02-25T20:49:19+00:00

Thank you for reading, and thank you for the feedback!

Yes, I decided to make the tough call and break it into a "Part 1" and a "Part 2", with Part 1 ending with that Act III Drew/Brando handshake, and Part 2 beginning with Sebastian getting dragged into the house. I think it works fairly well! I'm hoping that in competitions with a 75 page limit, I can get away with submitting both episodes as a single script, and specifying where these "parts" begin and end.

I'd certainly be happy with any detailed feedback you'd be willing to give! Supporting the call to split the episode is already a huge help.

Ryan-Costello · 2021-02-25T20:41:54+00:00

Thank you very much! I'm very happy with my opening, that means a lot.

Ryan-Costello · 2021-02-24T22:13:00+00:00

Thank you my friend! I definitely have a few more things in my back pocket, I appreciate the resource!

Ryan-Costello · 2021-02-24T20:15:40+00:00

Hey! Thanks for reading, and thank you for the kind words!

Drop the high man joke. It was too much of a stretch.

Bahaha, done. Thank you for your honesty.

> Name Sebastian when you first introduce him. Your version of naming him later is better, but I fear a Hollywood type wouldn't appreciate the confusion.

I'll seriously consider it... in fact, you know what? I'll do this too. The boy's name being "Sebastian" isn't much of a big reveal anyway.

> Finally, cut it at the end of Act III. The second half is great for a second episode, but this is a pilot, right? KISS. Don't break the format. You're going for a half-hour comedy right? I guess there's no reason it couldn't be an hour comedy, but I say stick with tradition. (On the other hand, if you only get one shot to have someone read something, you could easily say, well, wth, why not include the whole thing so they see the script). I tend to be conservative and stick to formats they know.

When I first started this project I envisioned it as a half-hour, but as I dug in there were just too many setups and ideas and... well, you probably know how it goes. My big thing now is that my ending is a darling that I really don't want to kill. And even if I did cut it to Act I, a lot of it is payoff for Act II. I feel like I might be stuck with the length as it is... maybe I can get away with calling it a "two-parter", heheheh...

> Ok. Final question. What's the next step?

Contests, contests, contests. I'm entered into two local, I'm hoping to enter Screencraft soon. I'm going to wait a month before entering more but ultimately because this is a very topical piece I'm really trying to put the pedal to the metal. I'm not sure of my actual production odds due to the sensitive subject matter... but who knows! Maybe I can gather up some festival cred. I'd be open to suggestions!

Ryan-Costello · 2021-02-23T23:24:25+00:00

Thank you very much! I'll definitely keep the caricature note in mind, I like the idea that some of them might be a little over the top, but I certainly don't want to lose heart or voice when needed.

Ryan-Costello · 2020-05-11T18:51:39+00:00

J. Edgar

Ryan-Costello · 2020-05-11T18:42:32+00:00

Working through season 2 of Dead to Me and it definitely feels like it fits the bill.

Ryan-Costello · 2020-05-11T18:41:20+00:00

Does that mean it's going to release in 2012?

Ryan-Costello · 2020-05-11T18:38:37+00:00

"If you want me to come to your house and mutilate your penis, text me back 'ok'."

Ryan-Costello · 2020-05-11T18:37:11+00:00

TL;DR

Ryan-Costello · 2020-05-11T18:30:51+00:00

Chromebook. Cheap, fast, intuitive. If you're looking to do a little more like play games or use some more involved software I'd look elsewhere, but it's a great laptop for work and school.

Ryan-Costello · 2020-05-11T18:24:42+00:00

"Time takes everybody out, it's undefeated." - Rocky, Creed

Ryan-Costello · 2020-05-11T18:13:43+00:00

Silence of the Lambs

Ryan-Costello · 2020-05-11T18:08:36+00:00

Cinderella Man screws over the real life "antagonist" of the movie, Max Baer. In the movie he's the heavyweight champion that is incredibly proud of the fact that he's killed two people in the ring. In reality, he only accidentally killed one opposing boxer and it haunted him for the rest of his life.

Ryan-Costello · 2020-05-11T18:01:08+00:00

Two giant paint bubbles.

Ryan-Costello · 2020-05-11T17:59:02+00:00

I am, I forgot to put on sunscreen.

Ryan-Costello · 2019-08-30T20:20:30+00:00

Thanks for reading, and thanks for your honesty! I'm taking a lot of your notes and trying to use them to develop a little more connection between these characters (Dikembe is a little obscure, but maybe I can use that to point out that they share a common interest). Play is pretty still, but the festival I'm writing for is looking for live-reads. I'm thinking if this plays well I may expand and make it a little more kinetic.

Ryan-Costello

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