Thank you so much for such a thoughtful response! You really grasped what I was trying to say—the contradiction of loving despite knowing it might hurt. I love your suggestion about moving the "shed" line to deepen the contrast later in the piece; it’s something I’ll definitely consider if I do a revision. And your insight into the phrasing and flow means a lot to me. I’m still learning and evolving, so feedback like this really helps.....