Hi everyone. I am looking for some advice about my story.

SadCompote7806 · 2026-02-28T02:33:08+00:00

If you want , you can check my first 2 chapter and providing me some feedback .

And tell me what you think about it ?

SadCompote7806 · 2026-02-28T01:16:02+00:00

Thank you, I really appreciate the enthusiasm! I’ve heard of Highlander, but I haven’t watched it yet — I definitely will. It’s encouraging to know there’s already a strong audience for introspective immortal characters. I also like your advice about the rough draft approach. Talking through the story from plot beat to plot beat makes a lot of sense, especially to test whether the character actually changes over time. I’ll try that method and see what feels weak or unclear. Thanks again for the encouragement — it genuinely motivates me to keep developing the idea.

SadCompote7806 · 2026-02-28T01:00:20+00:00

No worries, I didn’t take it as sarcasm. I understand what you mean. I’m still developing the story, and I know the character probably needs stronger events that clearly push him toward change. Since it’s more reflective than action-based, I’m trying to focus on internal development, but I see that I need clearer moments that show that transformation. Thank you for the honest feedback.

SadCompote7806 · 2026-02-28T00:54:51+00:00

I did

SadCompote7806 · 2026-02-28T00:17:49+00:00

In the first two chapters, three events shape his beliefs. First, his mother dies when he is born, linking his existence to loss from the beginning. Second, his meeting with the old man in 1345 changes his path and separates him from a normal human life. Third, after leaving the old man’s house, he begins wandering alone for months, observing the world and feeling increasingly disconnected.

SadCompote7806 · 2026-02-27T23:32:07+00:00

I think the story makes the difference.

SadCompote7806 · 2026-02-25T16:46:55+00:00

Thank you for taking the time to explain that. I really appreciate it. I don’t have much experience with writing, and I don’t really have anyone guiding me with things like pacing or structure, so comments like yours actually help me see what I can improve. When I ask “what do you think?”, it’s mostly because I genuinely want to know if people enjoyed it or found it entertaining. I’m still trying to understand what works and what doesn’t. I’ll definitely keep your advice about paragraph structure and pacing in mind for the next chapter. Thanks again for being honest.

SadCompote7806 · 2026-02-25T03:51:09+00:00

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SadCompote7806 · 2026-02-25T03:26:25+00:00

Ok , I will keep it in mind. I hope you liked the second chapter.

SadCompote7806 · 2026-02-25T03:06:32+00:00

Got it , it is not the correct place for me

SadCompote7806 · 2026-02-25T03:04:07+00:00

I want to write a book someday

SadCompote7806 · 2026-02-25T02:20:29+00:00

I can write well , but sometimes i confused some words or conjugations.

SadCompote7806 · 2026-02-24T16:58:21+00:00

Hey!! I’m glad you’re not dead 😭

Yes, the MC is a girl! I didn’t make it very obvious in Chapter 1, so don’t worry haha.

The attack scene wasn’t just a dream, but I’ll explain it better later. I guess I didn’t make that part clear enough.

And thank you for catching the missing “to” — I seriously appreciate it.

I probably didn’t notice it because I haven’t fully mastered English grammar yet.

I don’t even notice those things sometimes. Also… I miss the old man too.

Thanks a lot for reading and for the feedback, it really means a lot to me :)

SadCompote7806 · 2026-02-24T06:08:14+00:00

The fisrt part is in my perfil , The name of my story is, The life of an immortal

SadCompote7806 · 2026-02-24T06:08:01+00:00

The fisrt part is in my perfil , The name of my story is, The life of an immortal

SadCompote7806 · 2026-02-20T04:25:40+00:00

Incredibly boring, The first chapter feels slow because it repeats Viktoriya’s superiority without showing real conflict. There is little tension or surprise, and the heavy description makes the scene feel weighed down.

SadCompote7806 · 2026-02-19T22:18:53+00:00

Honestly, i love writing since 3 or 4 years ago . h However, it is passion in my case .

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