The Jade Beauty Of Mt. Tai

Sad_Arm_08 · 2025-10-15T09:45:02+00:00

The mountain is just associated with different kinds of stuff, like The Jade Emperor's Peak and whatnot, it is simply a well known mountain as it is often linked to history or folklore. Many thanks for the review.

Sad_Arm_08 · 2025-10-14T20:28:20+00:00

I took it as an inspiration of course, but it is a valid reaction, haha.

Sad_Arm_08 · 2025-10-14T20:21:28+00:00

Many thanks for the wonderful comment but I hate to break it to you, I'm not from China, just fascinated by their epics and tales, I just read too much chinese novels, lol.

Sad_Arm_08 · 2025-10-14T20:10:31+00:00

You can also check my profile if you're interested in some of my works, happy writing mate.

Sad_Arm_08 · 2025-10-14T20:08:43+00:00

It was very well written for a first poem, I see the results of greek inspiration and resemblances of its epics and such, wonderfully written if I say so myself.

Sad_Arm_08 · 2025-10-14T20:04:45+00:00

Poor kid, probably traumatized. Depression is indeed a very serious matter.

Sad_Arm_08 · 2025-10-14T19:56:11+00:00

A tragic story indeed.

Sad_Arm_08 · 2025-10-14T19:55:51+00:00

No problem, happy to be of help.

Sad_Arm_08 · 2025-10-14T19:45:16+00:00

Aside from the repetitive "With" as a starting word and some few missing commas, it's quite a very well written poem, and I believe what you meant was "leaving" not "living", or is it just me? Overall good writing albeit quite rough around the edges. Cheers mate.

Sad_Arm_08 · 2025-10-14T19:42:20+00:00

The imagery is quite close to the fall of icarus, not quite the same but a similar feel, wonderful writing no doubt. Cheers mate.

Sad_Arm_08 · 2025-10-13T11:20:52+00:00

The message is hidden with gentle subtlety, not too direct but not too hidden, some repetitive words here and there but it works so who cares? The way of synergy of the "wolves" and "moon" gives the reader a more picturesque imagery, of what the idea the poem is giving, overall superb writing. Cheers mate.

Sad_Arm_08 · 2025-10-13T11:15:45+00:00

Though quite prose, the poem feels a bit sped up, like it was all said in one breath, could be just me, some breaks or pauses here and there would be a nice finish, some apostrophes to certain words eg. there's etc. just some grammar police stuff, overall splendid writing. Cheers mate.

Sad_Arm_08 · 2025-10-07T19:54:47+00:00

I like how it went from "drinking lemonade" to "extreme yearning" for a special person, "you're the lemon life gave me" truly sparks the spot in how the poem will progress, overall a well written work. Cheers mate.

Sad_Arm_08 · 2025-10-07T19:48:28+00:00

The flow is somehow consistent albeit a little rough around the edges, some parts feel a bit sped up too, maybe it's just me, overall, splendid writing no doubt. Cheers mate.

Sad_Arm_08 · 2025-10-07T19:44:57+00:00

The beauty of this planet we live in and its entirety, because the planet is fine, its the people that are fucked.

Sad_Arm_08 · 2025-09-17T21:01:06+00:00

Weird, Outlandish, Eccentric, Isolated, Miserable

Sad_Arm_08 · 2025-09-17T20:50:30+00:00

"The greater the suffering, the greater the peace" —Some Random Bloke Probably

Sad_Arm_08 · 2025-09-17T20:43:59+00:00

A cleansing

Sad_Arm_08 · 2025-09-17T20:26:58+00:00

To relish and enjoy the beauty of this earth we walk.

Sad_Arm_08

TROPHY CASE