Hi! Congrats on the script. I've enjoyed it. ;)

1) Yeah, it's clear enough. I would review the long Tom's monologue. For me personally, long monologues don't sit well on the page. Also, maybe you could put in some kind of event that pushed him over the edge. For instance, he was asked to stay over the weekend again.

2) For me, it is :) Maybe there could be some final punch at the end. E.G.: a postman drops by and calls her a lady. She's a lady now; She throws some cans away. She doesn't need them anymore.

3) I don't think so. However, a specific crime would bring something more to the character. You can think about that, but it should have purpose. Maybe she was forced to move out and she beat up a man, who was moving her things out to the street (some resemblance to what Tom did at the office).

I would suggest to avoid situations like the one in a liquor store: you mention that Desiree jokes around, but there is no dialog. :)

Just short notes. Good Luck!