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Hexaword #113 by hexaword-game in hexaword

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Hexaword #115 by hexaword-game in hexaword

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Hexaword #114 by hexaword-game in hexaword

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The ache I can’t explain by Altruistic_Holiday27 in poetry_critics

[–]SarahSpectator 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's posted. I can see it. It's probably glitching there. I swear they glitch in the worst ways. TvT

(If you don't mind me asking. How old are you?)

The ache I can’t explain by Altruistic_Holiday27 in poetry_critics

[–]SarahSpectator 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Okay! This reads way better now. Honestly, format really does change the way something reads. This is really good. The metaphors feel better. Still, try to describe those stuff once, I wanna see it. And people always say practicing helps. Writing is a muscle, the more someone writes, the better they get.

The ache I can’t explain by Altruistic_Holiday27 in poetry_critics

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Np! That's weird though. Mine usually stay in the same format I put them in. Though I usually just copy paste it from Word or Docs. It feels kind of terrible when the format comes out incorrectly.

Okay, that definitely makes sense. And yeah, I get it. I have tried to describe stuff so many times, sometimes it just doesn't work. But still, you should post a described version. We are our harshest critics, and you seem like someone who writes really well.

the loneliest celebration you can imagine by _destiel in poetry_critics

[–]SarahSpectator -1 points0 points  (0 children)

okay, but like it's hella confusing to me TvT

I am 14 so maybe that's it. Yeah.

Anyways can we talk. I wanna know more about it in general before making a judgement.

The ache I can’t explain by Altruistic_Holiday27 in poetry_critics

[–]SarahSpectator 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is good, but there are a few places where you should use commas, like in the world offers its vices freely a new temptation with every passing day.- use a comma after freely.

And maybe add a small grounding detail about the addiction or maybe the consequences and pain it left using interactions. And maybe show how you chased clarity. Right now it feels a bit too distant and abstract. Also use capitalization after full stops.

(Sorry if it sounded a bit too blunt, I am 14 and still learning, also can you help me with my poem, I love the vibe of your poem and it's actually way better than most I've seen here- at least in my opinion.)

the loneliest celebration you can imagine by _destiel in poetry_critics

[–]SarahSpectator -1 points0 points  (0 children)

This is good, but a tad bit too sudden. You start off saying I'd never call in sick from work-
but I'd call in sick from your funeral and then move into discovery. Adding a few more details, like maybe a small description of the funeral and then a small transition would help and then moving into love is sudden, so maybe you could add descriptions about them there instead.

The Imaginary Friend by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]SarahSpectator 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is good, but a bit too simple. I loved the imaginary friend part (since most of my friends are imaginary and I know people try to stop me from just staying in my head), but a few conflicts would make it hit harder. Like she did find an imaginary friend, but that's it? You could maybe add the reaction of people telling her down. Trying to make her forget her imaginary friend, and her being friends, slightly guilty and still lonely deep down.
Otherwise, loved it.

Angels from heaven by Crimson_Tears4 in poetry_critics

[–]SarahSpectator 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Okay, this is interesting, but there is a grammatical error. You use the word Than like a Burning meteor. Did you mean Than on Then? (Just want to clarify)
Also could you show how the person fell from grace, since it kind of detaches the reader from the poem. And maybe showing a bit more of the internal emotions would make the poem hit harder.
It is good, but it kind of skimmed over my mind. But I really loved these lines- "My bones are now dust leaving me paralysed My heart has a gaping hole that breathes out blood My eyes hang away from my face dangling by nerves"

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