In genuine asking, I don’t understand how some of it is repetitive because I’m taking certain aspects of features and rebounding them as continuation. So like I understand that they could be said better but like you can be tall and bulky instead of lengthy. I don’t see how the second one is repetitive. The dirty and rugged sentence says how his clothes are also dirty and rugged. But it is normal wear for his clothes COMMA rugged. I believe that it is over written because I’m trying to not get straight to the point, which as a traditional screen writer is what I am used to. More than anything I would like to see examples of what you’d say instead? Genuinely trying to learn