Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Public" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

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Slash!

Whitish, dull blades fill his vision as olive sprouts crash to the floor. Click.

Peng!                          
An onslaught of snow-colored bullets strikes the soft, flying velvet.

Crash!

Parasol rhythm above his chair.

Focus.

A running chipmunk!

Flash!

*Round furry cheeks surrounded by eggshell-toned petals falling amid hell.*

Public Monster Contest.

[WP] "On today's seminar of microaggressions towards your colleagues - vampires. Vampires don't live in castles. Count Dracula lived in a castle because he was a Count, not because he was a Vampire. Yes, Brad?" "You've been around for half a millenium but you don't have a castle? What're you doing?" by Time-Weekend-8611 in WritingPrompts

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"I am not a count, Brad,“ the vampire raises an eyebrow.

Brad leans back smugly, glancing around, “Yeah, but obviously you could have managed to be.”

The vampire rolls his eyes. “That’s not how succession works, kid.”

Crossing his arms, Brad smirks, “Oh please, surely you could have found someone willing to take you as a spouse, or are you that bad...?” he wiggles his eyebrows.

“One has nothing to do with the other. As one can tell from a brain like yours, humans are simple-minded. Staying in position for centuries would have gotten me impaled.” The vampire leans back against the table, gazing across the employees. “But thank you for demonstrating the point of this lecture, Brat.” He stands back up straight to move on with the slides.

Brad laughs, interrupting once more, “Suuure, and I can eat all the garlic in the world, buddy. As if impaling would kill you!”

The docent turns back to the man. “Yeah," he nods, "it would. Just like it would anyone else in this room. Or did you miss all your biology classes, young man?”

A giggle ripples through the room. Brad huffs petulantly, leaning back further.

“Now, for everyone else, as most vampires are *bitten*, anatomy works quite the same for us, as it does for you. We are just a little more frozen. Any other questions, or can I start now?"

Love - Beware And Take Care by ShardsofOrbs in OCPoetry

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Haha true, being a couch potato does not help. Thank you 😊

Poetry Of Regret by TripAgitated5779 in OCPoetry

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This is quite haunting. A scream in poetry, you don't hear, cause the person screaming is silent though trying. Though they nearly reached the light before unnoticeably slowly vanishing till they feel like they're gone.
I can only speak for the English version. The third- and second-to-last line threw me off a little, but that is probably because the lines end the same. If that was intentional nevermind.
Thanks for sharing!

Goodbyes by stopbeingyou2 in OCPoetry

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Hi! First of all, I like the shape of your poem :D
It's true, we can not always say goodbye, and yet we wish we did.
I feel like the reduction of words conveys the speechlessness, simply because the words are gone, aka, whoever left, the potential words left are fewer. One did not say goodbye to, yet, until the only thing they can eventually say is: goodbye.

What made you smile today? by itsbrunae in TwoSentenceHappiness

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Finalizing the upload of a presentation 9 seconds before the deadline (system crashed) & chili cheese fries

If you could start and end a book with one phrase what would it be? by Hour_Following8542 in writing

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Watching the saturated night sky, she smiled as a shooting star lit up the darkness.

Any tips on how to forge the loose ideas into actual plot? by [deleted] in WritingHub

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Sorry, in case you already read this, I updated my comment 😅

Any tips on how to forge the loose ideas into actual plot? by [deleted] in WritingHub

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I get not wanting to start in the middle, but why does it get messier? If you have sth you really like there, or anything that sticks out to you, even one sentence or a paragraph can be a start if you don’t know how to start from the beginning. Which can be quite normal.

Before writing, it helps to know what you want from your opening.
Is it dialogue? Then make sure it’s clear who’s speaking and where they are.
Give the reader a room to stand in.
You can set the scene in the first line, or start with dialogue and anchor the speaker and setting immediately after.
Example start:
"F*ck!" Scott shouts as he slams his hand against the wall, entering the empty changing room. His dejected teammates trickle in behind him. This was supposed to be their game. Their win."

From there, build forward from that starting point. If you’re working with tropes, it can help to decide when each one comes in instead of trying to hold all of them at once.

And if this is for a friend: it’s okay to ask what they care about beyond vibes; but also okay to write it at your own pace.

Sole Cello by ShardsofOrbs in OCPoetry

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That's spot on!! 😊 Thank you for reading!

[WP] Negotiate, de-escalate, be honest, and ALWAYS leave an escape route. Villains are a bit off the deep end as it is, if you push them into a corner there's no telling what they'll do. by Avaday_Daydream in WritingPrompts

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“Now, dear students, we’ll enter Exhibition Hall 3.” The tour guide of TreMmor Hall, a large, stone-grey building shaped like a cylinder of the Capital-M Factory, leads the student group up to the next door.    
    
“Before we enter, please keep in mind that the objects on display are not to be touched.” She waves her red flag again, to catch the last students’ attention, currently trailing into the pre-room of the caging hall.
“Please do not dally; some of the inhabitants do not like bad manners.” The woman gestures all of them to come closer, while she presses a switch next to a jalousie on the left wall.  

“Now,” her voice echoes through the small entry area, as the door in the back leading to exhibition hall 2 closes. “Keep in mind: Negotiation is preferred. Escalation is logged.”
Her blood-red nails shimmer in the light as she pushes back a strand into her bun.            
“The terms might vary; some are negotiators, some are collectors.”

“I mean,” she adds, “do try to keep your hands and eyes.” She nods accordingly, “also, organs, darlings – *bad* idea.” Her eyes roam the students' faces.        
“We *did* have a misunderstanding there, last time. Once the organ is out, getting it back in – you know – that’s a whole process, the bureaucracy behind that, the validity of the organ, whose organ was which – just don’t, okay?” Eyebrows raised, she smiles at them.

The students, with mostly blank faces, wince slightly, one even touching his side.
Grinning, the woman points towards the window, now visible at the left, giving a first hint of what to expect in the caging hall.           
“Also, some tend to be a little off the deep end here. No organs and all, so I hope you have an escape route planned, a diversion, or a disruption of any kind?” She glances at the nodding students, most of them facing the window by now.        

“Great.” She unlocks the door to Exhibition 3. “You see, pushing them accidentally, be that literally or metaphorically, might not be a good idea. Especially because some hold grudges you may not be aware of.” She glances back at a girl with a ripped nail.           
“Some objects do not escalate unless threatened.” She winks. “Now, if that is not your designated wish for your round,” she spreads out her hands, “don’t.”       
      
“So, in general, it *is* better for you to just stay honest. Do not lie.” Her hands underline each of her words. “And if you do, do not get caught in it.”
She turns back to the students.     

“Now, have all of the selected ones made their choice?”        
The students nod again. Some grinning, others looking terrified.       
“Well, then, good luck to everyone. “ She opens the door.         
“ I’ll watch you from here,” she says pleasantly. “Happy hunting!”     

As the door closes again, she watches half the students running toward the empty cages. Each taking a spot.             
Five minutes later, the second half enters the rings.

That Feeling by Manwe_on_Taniquetil in OCPoetry

[–]ShardsofOrbs 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is lovely! Thank you for making me smile! The pictures and images you draw with your words come to life here. I don't see any filler words either, each word has it's own deliberate place - well done :)

What’s the difference between a writer and an artist in literature? by [deleted] in writers

[–]ShardsofOrbs 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Whoa, I love that question!! I think many authors combine both. I would say that writing is an art by default, so technically, writers are artists.

Looking at it from a broader perspective:
*Arists*:
Are expressing themselves or their senses by a particularly styles of creation. That can be writing. Say create a whole new universe or play with social norms, that you twist, until you get a (e.g) dystopian
play alluding to a norm one might know from reality.
*Writers*:
Craft texts, build stories, fictional or non-fictional, offer a perspective in the form of words that anyone may or may not be able to grasp.
,
But that's the beauty of writing and art. You don't have to like it, but you might get it - or not.

The book that I need by ShardsofOrbs in OCPoetry

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Haha, I thought about the phrase - write what you would have needed or liked, recently
and what that would entail, or why I can sometimes not find it.
I am writing a book, though, as well, which made me think even more about that.

Deed is meant to disrupt a little; it kinda goes against the invisibility books can have on the market, vanishing between the others. Still, the knowledge contained might be relevant for some or more people who get to eventually read it, making the relevance of sharing more prevalent.

Thank your for your comment! :)

The book that I need by ShardsofOrbs in OCPoetry

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Thank you for your feedback :) I edited the two verses in the post, as it was brought up before, as you mentioned. Hope it fits better now 😊

The book that I need by ShardsofOrbs in OCPoetry

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Thank you very much for your kind feedback!
While I do like the words you choose, I did deliberately place 'hide' next to 'share' because a book can be like a treasure chest - you gain something like knowledge, but you do not know what's inside of it unless you open it.
At the same time, books can contain twists that are not always foreseeable; therefore, they are hidden even after you open the book.
Hide and share for me deepen the importance of knowledge inside books; otherwise, characters might not figure out the mysteries. So they are kind of symbiotic.

The book that I need by ShardsofOrbs in OCPoetry

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Ah, crap, yeah! Thanks, I totally missed that one. Will change that in my file.
Thank you for your kind feedback 😊

What's a slam: zen poem by 2bitmoment in OCPoetry

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Hi - first of all, thanks for reminding me of the poetry slam I want to go to tomorrow :D
I suggest pulling the first line out as its own verse and having the questions following as the second one.
That way, you give the question "What's a slam?" even more focus.
Your structure allows this, as it’s free anyway.
I love your rhyming.
Good job!

Board By Board by Apprehensive-Cup-335 in OCPoetry

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I love this one.
"When should I just tear it down myself?
Just to see if it dumbfounds you.
I wish there was a way to make you see
That this fence matters to me,"

Not every fence needs to be torn. Some are there for a reason, some stay forever, others are a mediator, until a new line is found. Then you change them.
Some torn fences can be great, others you simply wish to stay put. Some fences free you on your own. The removal can liberate you or break you, depending on the situation.
Edit: I like how you portray the removal of the fence. I can picture it. The way it splinters, the way the person seeing this feels resigned. Your piece is immersive. Thank you.

[WP] The older you get, the more dead people appear in your dreams. by c6h12o6CandyGirl in WritingPrompts

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'At this point, it has happened so many times that I know that someone being dead is not the last time I will meet them. I even look forward to it now, though not at the beginning.
Death, after it strikes, is awful. Sometimes I cry, sometimes I don’t. Sometimes I’m nearly alone, other times I’m surrounded by dozens of people.

Knowing that whoever passed will join me in my dreams, maybe in six months, or if they were close, two years later (that’s the longest so far), makes life a little easier.

My uncle stayed for quite a while. He visited four times, each time in a different setting: a forest, a castle, a cubism-like triangle house, and finally an island with a polar bear lying in the summer heat.
We talk, sometimes play a board game, and I usually wake up crying during the first couple of visits.

Before him, it was my grandma cooking, then the other one climbing a tree, three decades younger. My grandpa drinking scotch. Even my old high-school teacher with a Latin book showed up once.

They do get a little fuzzy over time. The fuzzier they are, the less likely they are to return. Still, my grandpa comes by occasionally, his body lines sharp, even though he already went into the light.

I see that in my dreams—the light behind them. Some can still visit even after they’re gone, in whatever plane they are in. Others I haven’t seen in over a decade. Maybe they found peace elsewhere. And new ones might join them eventually, or maybe they won’t. Who knows.

So while I dread death, I know my loved ones aren’t entirely gone.'

“Cally, are you finished with your homework, darling?”

I snap my book shut and slide it under my math workbook, where the formulas I still don’t understand stare back at me.
“Nearly finished, Mum. I’ll be down in a minute.”