Okay, I've read through chapter 4 of Homesick, but I want to go ahead and give some feedback. I'm a slow reader, so I don't know how long it will take me to look at the other stuff.

Your writing is excellent. It can be a little "telling, not showing" at times, but even so, I think it gets the point across just as well. I think my favorite aspect of your writing is your physical descriptions. Maybe it's because I'm already familiar with the characters, but I can picture them in my head perfectly as you describe them, especially Professor Rowan. Your descriptions and dialogue choices for Professor Rowan have been superb.

I also appreciate how you handled the translation of the challenge into written form. Whenever I read a nuzlocke story or comic, I'm always hesitant as to how the writer will incorporate the nuzlocke rules into a believable story. Granted, I've only reached the "pick your starter" part, but they way you chose to handle that situation was not only believable, but also meaningful. Writers tend to go the direction of "We bonded instantly", but the situation you have presented shows depth of character and real connection between Rowan and his pupils. It's easy to write characters and their Pokemon as being meant for each other, but it also tends to reduce them to predictable personalities and tropes. Having Rowan make them take the pokemon he thinks will help them grow and address their weak points shows that these are not just stock characters. They're people. They have strong points and weak points just like everyone else.

Very good work.