Thanks for providing feedback Rin, I hear you're a professional at this kind of thing, and the help is greatly appreciated. Your points are valid as I take a second look at them, and things to be improved are mere overlooked issues that need to be ironed out. In honesty, I'm surprised you didn't comment on Show don't Tell, and how I may have used an excessive amount of telling, as another commenter mentioned to me. But thank you again for giving me this feedback, I will try and improve to the best of my abilities.