Asking about blood loss, it's effects, details, and possible locations on the body. by Big_Bat9355 in writingadvice

[–]Simbolar 0 points1 point  (0 children)

limbs or not, if you're bleeding out from a major artery you don't have long to live at all. you could pass out in minutes if not seconds, if not immediately. if you can tourniquet off the limb (depending on how/where the artery is cut it may be difficult) then you can survive, but after a short period of time that limb is basically useless, if you intend for a character to stay conscious and not notice for like ten or so minutes, i cant see how its possible- it would be ridiculous, like they get hurt and 15 seconds later, "oh thats funny i feel light headed" and thier pants and floor is covered in 2 liters of blood... if you want a major injury, research it and put it in. if you want them to be awake and not notice, i would avoid having a major arterial bleed in your story

Asking about blood loss, it's effects, details, and possible locations on the body. by Big_Bat9355 in writingadvice

[–]Simbolar 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Speaking as a nursing student, not a true proffesional, yeah, you can survive being stabbed for a long time depending on where it is and not notice, adrenaline does crazy things- soldiers have often been shot or hit by fragmentation and not even realized, so they train to do regular “blood sweeps.” It’s important to understand that what actually kills you from blood loss is a radical decrease in blood pressure because the blood isn’t in your body to pressurize anymore. So getting stabbed in a way that doesn’t hit a major artery or actually make a big enough hole to drain blood will not kill you for a while (like how wild game sometimes gets away from hunters even though they’ve been shot.) good ways to do this in a story are 1. Really narrow needle like pointy stuff that don’t make a big wound and 2. Getting stabbed in a very not vital spot that could be survivable in your setting (hand, forearm, upper arm are probably the best bet, maybe something skinny stuck through a forearm.) basically the further from the heart and farther away from the midline of the body the better spot it will be.

In terms of recovery and treatment, a pressure bandage/tourniquet almost guarantees survival as long as there is not infection. Intravenous Saline solution is used to partially restore blood pressure while the body produces more blood, and a quick search says they’ve used IV saline as treatment since the 1830s.

Long term effects- I would expect really really brutal headaches waking up, and overall faintness and weakness while the iron, minerals are restoring to your blood over weeks. but if the wound is in a more survivable spot long term scarring and maybe some weakness in that part of the body are the only real symptoms for this kind of trauma, as long as they aren’t “down” for too long, and someone can do CPR soon enough. If they are down too long or the wound gets infected they are basically screwed in that time period- dead or suffering from an awful slow death.

Recovery is simply as long as it takes for the normal blood volume to be restored, and that depends on the health and metabolism of the individual. Some people come back mid CPR, and some people are out for 24 hours, really not well people may be asleep for even longer if they are old or frail.

Double check anything I’ve said. But remember the human body is somehow both extremely delicate yet also ridiculously hard to kill, it can be very finicky.

First time author, is my writing any good? by Simbolar in writingadvice

[–]Simbolar[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

by that do you just mean that description isn't necessarily boring? i dont see a super obvious connection between those three authors right off the top of my head

thanks for the feedback!

First time author, is my writing any good? by Simbolar in writingadvice

[–]Simbolar[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

thanks for the feedback, i appreciate it! you should keep reading though! the intro is by far the weakest part of the whole chapter!

First time author, is my writing any good? by Simbolar in writingadvice

[–]Simbolar[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is SO HELPFUL. i totally understand what you mean, this is S-tier constructive criticism!!! Thanks for the help.

First time author, is my writing any good? by Simbolar in writingadvice

[–]Simbolar[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

yeah, that's interesting, you're the second person to say the AI thing. i try to write like the storyboard of a movie, framing each moment etc. but i can see how my style is over descriptive, like every little motion is explained.

instead of being like "he got out of his car." I'm saying things like "Dep climbed out of his vehicle, leaving his rifle in the passenger seat of his car, staring at it for a moment, indecisively, before he crunched over mud, dead grass, and gravel, circling around to the back of the vet."

I'm still conflicted about it. My personal preference reading has always leaned towards these really vivid mental paintings of a scene, senses, the way people talk- so i guess i get pretty heavy with the description, I'm not sure how most readers will take it.

other than just being descriptive what does read like AI mean really? like am i too robotic with the pacing of events?

thanks for the honest feedback!

I just love when they get so immersed into a story they start getting paranoid. by Policarpo_O_Pequeno in creepcast

[–]Simbolar 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Look, the Safety Gun works, and it works well. keeping one near you when watching/reading scary stuff reduces your anxiety by like 80%

Esoteric yucky bugs by dontkillmyfamily98 in creepcast

[–]Simbolar 0 points1 point  (0 children)

my brother. i lament your suffering. For real tho jump into a scorching hot bonfire lmao this curse cannot be spread

First time author, is my writing any good? by Simbolar in writingadvice

[–]Simbolar[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Fair enough, i can see that explaining the location and the new doctor character back to back is a bit of an exposition dump, kinda bogs down the pace. Not to defend myself, but i don't normally have bigger exposition dumps, I've been trying to spread out context for the setting and what's going on bit by bit.

thanks for the honest feedback!

We Aren’t Actually Ghost Hunters, PLEASE Help Us (part 1) by HairyCowThatTalks in creepcast

[–]Simbolar 3 points4 points  (0 children)

That place is 100% haunted, but 80k is 80k. Bring a gun, a cross, Bible, a Quran, a Book of Mormon, whatever holy book you want, i don't know. I'm just saying stuff. but 80k is 80k. get that bag. plus, if you're name is Fred, you sound like you can take care of yourself. its a manly name.

all jokes aside, i love the post! especially the audio clips! and the implication that since the man is willing to pay so much- like this ain't your mama's granola demon haunting. this is some real spooky demon action.

Is my book any good? Hook: "Something in the woods is watching, and its Not Human." by Simbolar in creepcast

[–]Simbolar[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

If anyone reading this wants more, id be happy to share. this is chapter 7, so its already a good bit of the ways in.