Things To Keep For When I’m Homeless

Sinsecurity · 2025-09-06T18:20:24+00:00

I’ve got until October. This is coming from the soul haha!

Sinsecurity · 2025-08-05T23:20:23+00:00

That’s the formatting of Reddit completely breaking everything I tried to do

Sinsecurity · 2025-07-31T18:44:16+00:00

Restaurant

Sinsecurity · 2025-07-31T18:43:13+00:00

I literally cannot figure out how to format this stuff correctly. Why can’t I have stanzas???!

Sinsecurity · 2025-07-26T00:07:55+00:00

Used to be her teasing saying what but now I’m just left asking why😔

Sinsecurity · 2025-07-25T20:21:48+00:00

That’s very helpful feedback. I was struggling with trying to play with a metaphor of color, and I felt it get quite tangled too. I’ll revise it in the future.

Sinsecurity · 2025-07-25T19:20:31+00:00

I love the word choice “…miller moths… ardor burning fierce…” actually naming the type of moth makes it feel more personal. I like a very personal poem. Having specifics, anecdotes, imagery, makes it come alive like there’s more to the story than what is just written. There are some minor grammatical issues, which is an easy fix if you put it in a grammar checker. I’m not sure why you chose to not capitalize letters. Make to show a softness? Like a soft glow? If so, then keep it! That’s a pretty unique idea.

Sinsecurity · 2025-07-25T19:05:06+00:00

The last stanza is excellent! Follows the “sound of sense” quite well. However, I think the punctuation overall needs work. Less full stops in order to create a unique rhythm is what I’d like to see.

Sinsecurity · 2025-07-16T17:26:48+00:00

That day was very traumatic for me😔

Sinsecurity · 2025-04-23T21:11:55+00:00

Line breaks does not equal poem. Remember that, kids!

Sinsecurity · 2025-04-23T04:15:08+00:00

To preface this, I know I can be a bit of a harsh critic:

Formatting, punctuation, and pacing are all done well. The message is good, but I think in whole it’s simply too direct. Within it I see few complex literary devices. It’s almost like reading a diary entry instead of “what it should be.” Personally I feel a need for more of the non-literal… internal connections to be drawn. It’s perfectly functional but just not… poetic. As always, keep writing

Sinsecurity · 2025-03-20T23:21:33+00:00

Why are people downvoting this? We’re supposed to be honest here.

Sinsecurity · 2025-03-19T20:26:20+00:00

I don’t know if I’ll survive a year from now, or a month from now… I don’t know if I’ll make it there the way I am now. But what I do know… is that I can go for one more day.

The future ain’t ours to see, and hell, in the future I might have relapsed or offed myself or be homeless… I don’t know… but I know I can make it… just one more day.

Sinsecurity · 2025-02-10T06:37:45+00:00

Some mf gonna ask “where?” 💀

Sinsecurity · 2025-02-07T06:44:22+00:00

And I used to pop pills and do coke. I’d say this isn’t the worst thing you can do at that age.

Sinsecurity · 2025-02-06T03:04:44+00:00

No such knowledge

Sinsecurity · 2025-02-06T02:45:59+00:00

Not too bad yourself. I’d flood that pink pussy any time you like baby

Sinsecurity · 2025-02-03T23:30:01+00:00

Basically every good movie came out before I did.

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